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Lone Insomniac
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45


0 posted 2000-09-03 09:30 AM


this is one of my old poems, but also one of my favorites...

Burning tears

Help me, I need you
I don't know what to do
I don't know which way to flee
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

You say you don't love me
Only I feel what love can be
Look in the mirror, I can see
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

If I could ease the pain
No thanks, see it again and again
My heart stopped following me
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

Ashes to ashes I can't live on
Waiting for the path to walk along
Dust to dust, shadows of my tree
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

One by one they keep falling
My love for her keeps calling
In my ocean of misery
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

Feeling like I'm between heaven and hell
In a place where's nothing left to tell
Just feeling my wandering love deathly
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

No peace of mind, screaming all day
I can't feel anything anyway
Entombed by my only pain, lovely
Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity

I will wait, there is nothing else to do
Blind, looking for someone who's true
Hope I'll find her, truly and deeply
Burning tears have scarred my LIFE for eternity


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Jenabou
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
1 posted 2000-09-03 10:14 AM


beautiful poem
i love your style
i could really feel the emotion in it
well done


Love Ya Bunches
~Jen~

        


The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

2 posted 2000-09-03 02:29 PM


Great poem, very impressive.  That's an old poem? Wow how long have you been writing?  Great, keep it up
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-09-03 02:58 PM


Dear God, do you have any idea how awesome this is?!? I must say you've taken my breath away. Rock and roll, my friend!

*~Meredith~*


I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-09-03 09:30 PM


I am not worthy I am not worthy (faithlessly chanting) hehehe you are awesome!!!! damn I'm speechless (trust me that's hard to master!) Keep it up!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
5 posted 2000-09-03 09:39 PM



        This was a really good poem.  It sounded like you were really in love.  I don't have the talent to write somthing like that.  When I write, I get strait to the point, but you...I don't know.  I'm really REALLY enjoying your poetry.  By the way, check your e-mail...I wrote you.


~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-09-04 08:40 AM


Very nicely penned LoneInsomniac!  I can see why this is one of your favorites ... I think it's one of mine now too!  The repetitive ending line to each verse re-inforced your sentiments, and the twist to it at the end was powerfully poignant. Really well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Pixie-Babe03
Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387
Central Maine
7 posted 2000-09-04 08:02 PM


Great poem!  It is very strong and moving!  Keep up the good work!!!
Luv
~*Pixie*~

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