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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Of all of those I've met today, all will serve their purpose. Some will hate me, some will love me, some may make me cry. These people come to me in faith, although the reasons may be unclear. The person whom I met today, may teach me how to care. This one of whom I walk with today, may teach me not to trust. I may end up with regret, of having met this one, but alas they came into my life... with some lesson I must learn. So I look at you today my friend, and understand a need... to be with you in some way, to take in all you give. Please be the one who will love me, the one who may mend my heart. Please be the one to carry me...after my whole world falls apart. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes hello, this is Javier. Anyway id like to know how long you've been writing. Anyway, the message of the poem was cute. I dont understand though how the whole poem doesnt ryhme....yet the last 2 linez do. Was this by accident? Ok....tankz for readin...adios....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hello, Javier... is it? I do not appreciate you condescending tone. Most people are receptive to people's poetry, and read openly. You, however, come in here, post crazy messages, and try to "nicely" put people down...I think you should attempt to be a little nicer to people... you know I don't tend to follow a particular rhyme scheme, I find no need. I have no urge to explain my writing to you. I'd thank you to think before you say things....you could be hurting feelings. Jenn [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 09-01-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jenn~~I actually like it that you can write without rhyming...You write really good...I even read this to my best friend and she loved it...She thinks that it is really good too without the rhyming...And I give you props cause thats something I just cant do...Keep up the good work...  ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jenn, do you honestly think I was trying to put you down? No way! I was just wondering why the poem was written like that. Unlike some readers I like to probe deeper within a poem and ask the poet WHY rather than just accept it and move on. I liked the poems message. In no way was i degrating you, or the poem. Chillzzzzzz out  Anyway it seems you've been watching me and my posts and think i'm this huge #(*#)(*$#. On the contrary Jenn! I am anything but a #(*#)(*$#...... I try and see the slightest bit good in a poem. On the other hand, I do not believe every poem is GOOD. I think it's a crock if every poem was good. IN MY WORLD, IN MY OPINION, IN MY PERSPECTIVE.....not every poem is good for ME. I am sure a bad poem for me is GRRRRREAT for somebody else. You're poem was not BAD for me, i was simply questioning the style. You got very defensive over nothing. Anyway, I doubt you'll answer my question, so ummmm yea. But I will not apologize for my opinions, nor will I stop posting what I post. I am NICE to people. You are too quick to judge though. Maybe you should read some of MY work. Maybe you should read some of the posts I have made on poems that I think are great. Maybe you should just give it a chance. BYE! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
well uhm hello... I'm not going to argue along with U people..just gonna say something about the poem if that's allright ! I LOVE IT !!! I think the fact that it doesn't rhyme makes it so perfect...I think making a poem that doesn't rhyme is the best achievement you can make...it only worked once for me... poems that don;t rhyme most of the time say the most, just like this one.. I think it's great keep up the good work !!! greetzzz Robinn |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
There is nothing wrong with questioning a poem, or it's style, but I believe you could be more productive in getting your answers, if you possibly approached it differently. You immediatly put a person on the defensive by the way you speak of the writing... I believe I had just cause to be defensive towards you. I will read some of your poems... I've read one already...after you told everyone that love poems weren't needed, you wrote a really sad one, well in my OPINION it was sad, kinda gloomy. But you are a talented writer, I'll give you that. To everyone else: thank you so much for your kind words, free verse is my favorite, and I ususally don't rhyme things, it takes away what you truly feel, just because you're restricted. Thanks again for reading. [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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