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jytree
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since 2000-01-26
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0 posted 2000-09-01 11:56 AM


We all sing,
We all dance,
We all look for romance,
But what do we get when it ends.

When angels cry,
That is the luabby,
Sleep softly young man with such a broken heart,
We have lived,
We have loved,
Some have died,
Some lived on,

Tis a endless song,
Oh sweet tender merciful creations,
Why does it have to be this way???
I am cursed to walk this earth alone???
So much love escapes from my heart,
For the simple fact is I have no one to share it with.

Am I such a bad man I have been brought here to suffier a fate I have seen before.

When angels cry,
I fade into the night,
Still hurting, still alone.

When angles cry,
They cry for me

We all sing,
We all dance,
We all look for romance,
But what do we get when it ends.

When angels cry,
That is the luabby,
Sleep softly young man with such a broken heart,
We have lived,
We have loved,
Some have died,
Some lived on,

Tis a endless song,
Oh sweet tender merciful creations,
Why does it have to be this way???
I am cursed to walk this earth alone???
So much love escapes from my heart,
For the simple fact is I have no one to share it with.

Am I such a bad man I have been brought here to suffier a fate I have seen before.

When angels cry,
I fade into the night,
Still hurting, still alone.

When angles cry,
They cry for me


We all sing,
We all dance,
We all look for romance,
But what do we get when it ends.

When angels cry,
That is the luabby,
Sleep softly young man with such a broken heart,
We have lived,
We have loved,
Some have died,
Some lived on,

Tis a endless song,
Oh sweet tender merciful creations,
Why does it have to be this way???
I am cursed to walk this earth alone???
So much love escapes from my heart,
For the simple fact is I have no one to share it with.

Am I such a bad man I have been brought here to suffier a fate I have seen before.

When angels cry,
I fade into the night,
Still hurting, still alone.

When angles cry,
They cry for me





For when day turn to night I am still there
The fallen angel jytree

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DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
1 posted 2000-09-01 12:34 PM


Very nice poem, and often times we feel alone, just remember that there is always someone there for you, friends, family, and someday you'll find someone who your heart calls to and who's heart calls to you in turn.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-09-01 01:51 PM


WOW this is good!!! Kinda long but it doesnt bother me...

When angels cry,
That is the luabby,
Sleep softly young man with such a broken heart,
We have lived,
We have loved,
Some have died,
Some lived on,

That was really good!!!Cant wait to see more of your work!!!



~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2000-09-01 08:15 PM


Nice poem, long poem. It was a nice poem but your style was normal and the word "TIS" is elizabethan.....so for ME.....i don't know if it matches. I think the poem would kick butt if the whole thing was written in elizabethan or just normal how the rest of it was. I like the scheme of your verse and the poem layout....other than that....keep rollin.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-09-01 08:37 PM


we all feel alone at times, but there is always someone there. keep up the good work. love always ~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2000-09-01 09:50 PM


Hi jessica, yes well this is a comment due to your thing on "there is always someone there when your alone" stuff........ yea well from experience i know that there is not somebody always there. Just thought i'd add that. no offense of any sort....just a thought.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

6 posted 2000-09-02 09:34 AM


This is very nicely writ.....I really liked it and I'm not gonna say you'll always have someone when you're feeling lonely, but I am gonna say, someone is bond to roll along. How old are ya? Somewhere from 14-21 or something....well you've got a while to go then...don't expect love to show up when you need it cause it won't. It'll show up when the time is exactly right. Keep your head up! We love ya at Passions.

Salma

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7 posted 2000-09-02 01:09 PM


Salooma is right, love will find you when it's meant to find you. And, believe me, it is meant for you. It is meant for us all. All those lonely nights will just make you appreciate it more when it finds you...

And if things get too lonely, just come here to Passions. We love you!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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