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You're The Reason
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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You're The Reason.. I remember the sparkle in your eye, as I feel your wet tears fall from the deep blue sky. Your bright blue eyes, your milliondollar smile, they're all I ever see, I wanted to let you know exactly what you mean to me. But now it's too late, For you've stepped inside the doors of Heaven's gate. I just want you to know... You're the reason I smile, You're the reason I cry, You're the reason I love, You're the reason I live. And you're the reason I look back on our past, And remind myself that our love will forever last. **This really doesn't have a scheme..but oh well! thats the beauty of poetry  |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"And you're the reason I look back on our past, And remind myself that our love will forever last." Welcome back DQ! This is a beautiful piece. I know that everything will work out for the best. Good luck! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Wow!!! specially to the last stanza. I guess life isn't perfect but from now on when I look to my past, I'll look trhu the happy times. As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
But now its to late, For you stepped inside the doors of Heaven's gate. That sounds so good!!!I like the way you wrote the poem...Keep posting...I know you have more up in that head of yours!!!  ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
LoveBug~~ Hi Thanks so much..yeah thats my favorite part of the whole thing tooacrie~~hey ERICA! LOL sorry i just think thats so neat..thanks so much for replying! i missed u guys! ERIN~~hey babe! LOL Yeah I'm sure I've got more up here in my head, just need the motivation to get it on paper! love ya!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
very very good. I like the NO SCHEME part of the style cuz organized poetry can get oftly boring at times. I like a scribble here, a blop there.....haha ok yea. So great poem, nie nice.....adios! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Bravo! This is one of those poems that just clicks w/ me. Know what I mean? I'm giving you 10.0! Be cool. *~Meredith~* Somebody stop the world, I want to get off! *me |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey thanks everyone for replying!! Means alot!! <3 ya'll ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
wounderful I really enjoyed the poem and I think you did a great job keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
I must say this is very well written DancinQueen, and the last two lines I must agree with all wrap it up quite nicely! Salma |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey guys! Thanks so much for being so positive!! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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