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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2000-08-31 04:11 PM


Hey! Guys! I'm back   I know you all missed me! I just didn't have the motivation to write for awhile. But i'm back. I've been having serious family problems and i wrote this when i was upset one nite...its pretty short, sorry!!


My Pain

Nails screeching..
Shadows dancing..
Fist clenching..
this is my pain.

A smile without happiness..
A tear without feeling..
A heart without love..
this is my pain.

© Copyright 2000 Kiley - All Rights Reserved
Acies
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1 posted 2000-08-31 05:28 PM


This might be short, but it does tell us all about how you were definitely feeling that night.  Hope things get better

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Erin
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2 posted 2000-08-31 06:58 PM


DQ~~~Girl this is good!!!It doesnt matter if it is short or not...Its really good!!!It shows us how you were feeling...Keep up the good work...  < !signature-->

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~



[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-31-2000).]

DancinQueen
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3 posted 2000-08-31 07:20 PM


acire~~Thanks so much!  

ERIN~~Hey girlie!! thanks for replying...


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Lovely_Kris
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4 posted 2000-09-01 11:38 PM


Hi I think this poem was wounderful and Great and I hope to read more. I also hope things work out for you and keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

Salooma
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5 posted 2000-09-02 09:20 AM


Welcome Back! This was wonderful....the short phrases and words gave it a purpose...very nicely done!

Salma

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