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Allysa
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0 posted 2000-08-31 08:35 AM


You can guess,
but you might not be right.
You can try to see,
I won't put up a fight.
You can tell me secrets,
and I'll tell you mine.
You're so good to me,
you're one of a kind.
You said that,
I'm the one you think about.
And it's so much fun,
I don't bring you down./
But if every word,
you say is true.
Then I know,
that I want to be with you.
You can only see,
what I let out.
SO don't worry about me,
and don't have any doubt.\
I want u to always remeber,
one single thing that's true.
No matter what goes on in my life,
I will always love you.
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Gee, isn't he special? I take it you know who I'm talking bout. (Justin) And well, I am pretty sure we will get back 2gether, just in January, that's all. I don't know. I think I could wait that long, if I didn't live next door to the person who annoys him all day everyday. I think I have Justintitus. Who knows?


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DancinQueen
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1 posted 2000-08-31 04:30 PM


Hey! I think this was awesome! Keep up the great work  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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2 posted 2000-08-31 04:39 PM


Hey, this is a really good piece. I know that waiting for that special someone to return to you can be hard, but you just have to be strong. I hope things work out!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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3 posted 2000-08-31 04:44 PM


hey allysa.....this poem told me everything about NITSUJ  , and how special he is to you.  Great writing.....waiting to read more of your work

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Allysa
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4 posted 2000-09-01 03:32 PM


DQ and Lovebug: Thanks for replying.

acire: How's your life? Hope you've worked everything out with Erica. The NITSUJ situation isn't any better. But I did talk to him and if you want to know anything about it, e mail Lakewalker and tell him to forward the first message I sent you. Alrighty? Thanks for replying!
Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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5 posted 2000-09-01 04:25 PM


hey Allysa!!!

It's not going well with Erica...it hasn't in the last 3 1/2 months.  Specially now that she's pregnant w/ this guy's kid.  She was telling me how she hated the guy cause of things that happened after,  now i feel she wants to come back.  But i can't let her just play me around again.  I'm not gonna be ona leash anymore.  Don't get me wrong, I still love her but...you know what I mean.
I have this one poem i wrote before and i reposted it a month back.  It's the first part of my "reposts-just wanna let girls know how guys feel".  I know you'd really like that poem. look back like 30 days or less

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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