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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Trapped Trapped. With no way out. In a box. Six sides deep. Six sides low. Trapped. To look outside. At all of them. Smiling behind bars. Made of killing doubt. Trapped. Inside my worries. That lurk in people's shadows. People that in pain do weep. People down-hearted and blind. Trapped. Anxious to escape. This long journey I see. I'm ready to take off. Ready to leave now. [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:06 AM).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Salma~~~As always good poem girl!!!  I love it!!!Keep up the good work..This is a poem that Jeremy would really like since hes not into reading about love anymore...~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Salma, nice poem. I feel you girl. you should leave. I hope you gain your freedom soon from this box. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Trapped Inside my worries That lurk in people's shadows People that in pain do weep People down-hearted and blind" I love it...you are one great writer As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You always have to out-do yourself! This is fantastic. Definately a winner w/ me. I'm down w/ your style, yo. *~Meredith~* Somebody stop the world, I want to get off! *me |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Thanks to all of you guys.... Erin ~ You're the sweetest! Thanks for the great comment. Where has Jeremy been?? I haven't seen him around since the dawn of age. Have you gotten ICQ to work somewhat? Jose ~ Thanks a bunch....but I guess this isn't a place where I can't leave. I guess the poem tells you I'm trapped, but to me it's the people outside who are trapped. It's a confusing though. I'm behind bars looking at these people and all my fears are coming true, but to me they are the ones in trouble and I'm the outsider looking in. I might be ready to leave and go out there like all of them, but still I'll always have that box, that traps me in and holds me down. Do u kinda get what I'm talking about? My minds an absoulute jungle, you have no idea! Thanks for commenting. acrie ~ You have absoulutly no clue, how much your comment meant to me. I've never been called a writer directly and it's a great feeling. Thank You! LyricFetish ~ LOL Thanks for the comment "Lyric"...I'm down with the L-beat...love yo songs sis! Salma [This message has been edited by Salooma (edited 09-02-2000).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece. I know the feeling...  I hope you are able to free yourself soon. Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Thanks LoveBug....glad you like it! Salma |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
The funny part is that I totally know what you are saying. My mind isn't a jungle though, I would call it more of a desolate desert. hehehe a maze actually describes it better. but anyways, your poem is totally great!! You truly are a very talented writer! Keep it up my dear. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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