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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair

0 posted 2000-08-28 10:07 PM


Lakewalker did one of these earlier I think. Just add some words that you think will help someone, Id appreciate it if it rhymes and flows with the following peice. When someone posts a follow up Ill edit this message to make it longer.

When you fall apart and stumble down,
Create a smile to overthrow that frown,
Keep your head up in the highest air,
As If your too special to give a care,

When it seems that nothing works out
And that love is too good to be true
Be patient, and know when it's time
True love will come to you

And when it seems you have no control
Like ashes blown to the wind
Rest assured that all will work out
All things turn out right in the end

Push it down, and get back up!
Give it back as good as you got
Don’t take anything from anybody,
Rise like cream to the top of the pot!

Choosing to accept failure,
Is the WORST thing to do!
Get your pride back, come on!
Victory awaits you!

When it seems you have to fall
And you have no hope for all
Remember your dear friends
And the Love that never ends

As you dream of all things wrong
Remember that it won't take long
It may feel like the worlds worst caper
But don't forget to put your words on paper

When it seems like the world
Has left you all alone
There's no other place in the world
That is better than you home

People to support you
A place to bleong
Pick your life up off the ground
And don't say that im wrong

Don't struggle just to pull off
what others want you to do
Live your life the way you want
Live your life for you





[This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 08-30-2000).]

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LoveBug
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1 posted 2000-08-28 10:24 PM


I think that this is a great idea! Here's my contribution!  

When it seems that nothing works out
And that love is too good to be true
Be patient, and know when it's time
True love will come to you

And when it seems you have no control
Like ashes blown to the wind
Rest assured that all will work out
All things turn out right in the end


I hope to see more people respond to this challenge!  




"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

!!!
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
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2 posted 2000-08-28 10:44 PM


Push it down, and get back up!
Give it back as good as you got
Dont take anything from anybody,
Rise like cream to the top of the pot!

Choosing to accept failure,
Is the WORST thing to do!
Get your pride back, come on!
Victory awaits you!


-"Victory needs no explaination,
Defeat allows none."



jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
3 posted 2000-08-29 05:18 PM


Thanks you two, great contributions!

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

sweetcollege_girl
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4 posted 2000-08-30 01:19 PM


Great idea Jeremy..here are my contributions!

When it seems you have to fall
And you have no hope for all
Remember your dear friends
And the Love that never ends

As you dream of all things wrong
Remember that it won't take long
It may feel like the worlds worst caper
But don't forget to put your words on paper.

~*~SCG~*~




[This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 08-30-2000).]

Allysa
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5 posted 2000-08-30 04:53 PM


When it seems like the world,
has left you all alone.
there's no other place in the world,
that is better than you home.
people to support you,
a place to bleong.
pick your life up off the ground,
and don't say that im wrong.
Don't struggle just to pull off,
what others want you to do.
Live your life the way you want.
Live your life for you.

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
6 posted 2000-08-30 09:19 PM


Great lines, creates more flow, thanks!

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-08-31 10:44 PM


Everyone has mishaps
Don't think you're all alone
Just as Stella got her groove back
Soon you'll find the winners' zone

So chin up now, be happy
Let laughter dry your tears
If yesterday was crappy
Fill today with joy and cheer




Somebody stop the world,
I want to get off!
*me

Misty Blue
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since 2000-05-24
Posts 44

8 posted 2000-08-31 11:09 PM


Understand this
With meaningful concern
When its someone you miss
It's always your back you turn

Forget all the clutter
That surrouds your brain
Remember it's  like butter
Not like pain

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
9 posted 2000-09-01 06:34 AM


Great idea Jeremy ... and nice start! It was fun to wonder where you left off and other's began, by seeing it altogether at the top!  Here's a few more ...  

So if you're feeling down
  And need a hand to get back up,
Remember that there's many things
  To be so thankful of.

Your friends, your family, everyone,
  Are there to cheer you on,
So place a smile upon your face,
  Move forward ... and be strong!

jytree
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since 2000-01-26
Posts 336
omaha ark usa
10 posted 2000-09-01 12:44 PM


THINK I will add a little

When the world falls apart,
Use superglue or duck tape
and put it back together,

Remember to be kind and merciful
For you too shall receive mercy,

Don't leave the seat up!
If so you might just get it in the end,

Forget not the forgetful,
For the forget!

Remember to wear a smile,
Before someone steals it  

Remember to be yourself,
Because someone else is not you.

Remember my words,
For I was not serious when I did this






For when day turn to night I am still there
The fallen angel jytree

jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
11 posted 2000-09-01 04:30 PM


K I cant edit anymore, oh well, good poem that we all put together.

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

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