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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-08-28 05:07 PM


My God...I think this pain is growing,
I feel the hurt like a thousand knives.
You give me nothing to work from,
you crush the hope I had.

I knew that letting you back in was a mistake,
I should have just set you free.
I only continue to waste away, all alone, it's just me.
Sometimes I cannot even breathe...

Just go on with her, and let me be.
I'm so tired of caring about what you do.
I'm tired of living my life through you.
What we had is now through, just leave me be, I'll survive without you.


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Stotty
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1 posted 2000-08-28 05:45 PM


An excellent poem demonstrated here...wow!
I really enjoyed this so much so that I read it several times.  I had the same experience with my ex too, so I related closely to your fine words.  Keep writing, Michelle.

Erin
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2 posted 2000-08-29 02:14 AM


"I'll survive without you"...I love the way you worded this poem...It is so good...Keep it up...Cant wait to see more!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Allysa
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3 posted 2000-08-29 08:19 AM


I like this poem a lot. I hope you're not feeling like this, because I might be there and it's not a fun place. I would write more, but I'm not in the mood. Later Days! ~Allysa~

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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