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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY 
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WHEN YOU'RE NEEDED THE MOST Pushing you away, when I need you the most. Sitting in the rain, when you bring me a coat. Crying in my pillow at night, when I have your shoulder, & you to tell me it'll be alright. Sending you away, with words of sheer contempt. Telling you everythings okay, when nothing ever is. Watching you believe my lies, though wishing I could say, what's really on my mind. Too scared of your reaction, criticism, or rebuff. Dealing with life all alone, can sometimes be tough. Pushing you away, when you're needed the most. "I'm so afraid to love you, but more afraid to lose. Clinging to a past that doesn't let me choose." LOVE ELMO  I LOVE KEITH 4Ever! |
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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
Great poem! I really like how you wrote it. Dreams are the the gateways to making the impossible possible |
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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
Great poem! I really like how you wrote it. Dreams are the the gateways to making the impossible possible So many words, for the broken heart, it's so hard to see in a crimson love... All goo |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thanx! I'm not too fond of this poem lol. I couldn't find the right words. Oh well glad u liked it LOVE ELMO! |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow, great poem - well, not really great because it was sad, but great words though, and great use of words~~ Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me ~Beautiful~ ~Creed~ |
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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
hey I thought it was a great poem !!! I have to the feeling at the moment that I'm the one who's being pushed away...so maybe I can understand my girl a little bit more... thanks !!! greetz,robin |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Yea Thanx every1 Yea I have the tendency to do this to my boyfriend! I have a problem with letting people close to me because of the many times I've been hurt so I'm glad u all liked it LOVE ELMO <3 |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey dewd, I totally feel ya!! I always push people away, it's not cool at all, because I have pushed away many a potential "Mr. Right" guys. I must say I wish I didn't do this...but it all comes from being hurt and most of all being abandoned by my once best friend...My dad. Just be careful girl not to lose this one! Keep writing your work is excelent! can't wait to read more. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
thanx jessica- i know to well how it feels to be abandoned, maybe not as much physically but definatly mentally! Sowwie about u & your dad! My parents are divorced & I don't see my dad much either lots of love ELMO! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great writing Elmo! You've expressed your emotions well in this piece, and the flow was very good ... nicely done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thanx Kit LOVE ELMO <3 |
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