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Xeonox
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0 posted 2000-08-27 10:47 PM



Do not cry for I cannot wipe these tears
Do not hope for I cannot cure yours fears,
Do not wish for I am no fairy,
Do not speak for your are unheard,
Do not risk for I am not your savior,
Do not pray for I will not answer,
Do not ask for you shall not receive,
Do not write for I am close for the night,
Do not love for I am a wingless dove.


Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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Erin
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1 posted 2000-08-28 03:18 AM


i like this one...i have a couple of poems where i have repeated the same thing...like you did in the beginning of the sentence...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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2 posted 2000-08-28 10:49 AM


I like this one too, the repition works great.  Thanks for sharing this!  
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3 posted 2000-08-28 04:31 PM


Erin and Lakewalker, I thank you for your comments. Thank you very much.  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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4 posted 2000-08-29 11:34 AM


I must say this certainly was powerful. The repition sure was a nice one...keep writing!

Salma

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