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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Immaculate shiny hair Clad in designer wear Craving to melt into 'normal society' Where insecure SHEEP revel In their own, oblivious, mundane lives. Yelling, "Hey, I like you..(especially those shoes)" Whispering, "That boy yonder is STARING at ME!" Pitying(secretly laughing) at elderly in wheelchair, Sneering disgustedly at apparent deformities Shivering, selfish fear of uncontagious diseases Wrapping thick veils of personal oh-so-significant Problems, shrouding themselves From the harsh art of living. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is a strong poem, I like the tone of it. Wow, I read this several times now, and I really like how you've delt with this. It's awesome! |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
wow that was really one of those that you have to go back and read just to understand it. You've done this one very well! Keep it up...I can't wait to see more. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow, what a piece! You've said it all, my friend. I'm glad that you see things for what they really are. Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
WOW.  ."my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Cant say it any better than that! Great job! Love, ~Jeremy~ "I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering, I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection." ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerful writing Lani! You've captured these sentiments very well ... nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Thank you! Thank you sooo much! I am so glad you can see through this mask the world wants us to wear! This poem is very powerful and you can be very proud of it! Keep It up Lani!!! Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets tr |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Thanks everyone who replied, I really appreaciate it. Nice to know people agree with me.. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
This is absoultly true....I loved this, the words discribed highschool to the bit. Thanks for sharing! Salma |
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