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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2000-08-24 08:33 AM


Can you tell me what my life would have been,
If I had never met you?
Can you tell me if I'd be here,
with nothing else to do?
Can you tell me what I'd do,
If I didn't have you to call?
Can you tell me if I would,
do anything at all.
Can you tell me if my life,
has a meaning or a place?
Can you say what I want to hear,
and say it to my face?
Can you leave tomorow,
not knowing what was today?
Can you leave with knowing,
I've affected you some way?
Can you leave without knowing,
what went on inside my head?
Can you go on without knowing,
everything I ever said?
Can you go on without knowing,
the true me inside?
Can you go on without knowing,
why I had to hide?
Can you go on without knowing,
the difference between us?
Can you go on without knowing,
what's right and what is just?
Can you go on without knowing,
how much I loved you?
Can you go on without knowing,
there's nothing you can do?

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A new day! School, and Algebra awaits! See ya later!
I'm thinking about giving this web addy to my bud. He's a poet, he might like to join in on the fun. Whaddya think?

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

© Copyright 2000 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
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1 posted 2000-08-24 09:54 AM


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[This message has been edited by Jenabou (edited 08-24-2000).]

Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
2 posted 2000-08-24 09:54 AM


great poem.
And yeah of coarse you should give your friend this address
the more poets together the better i think!!!

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
3 posted 2000-08-24 11:32 AM


Allysa,
   First of all this was a lovely poem and secondly you should definately refer this site to your friend.  

                             Angel


Don't mess with the bull, young man. You'll get the horns.

~*Guardian of Light*~


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-08-24 12:05 PM


good poem...i forgot what else i was going to say...sorry but anyways i suggest that you do give it to your friend...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

5 posted 2000-08-24 04:58 PM


wounderful poem and yes I think you should give this site to your friend. Keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

Joy
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 10

6 posted 2000-08-24 06:59 PM


Just wanted to say thanks for posting this. My friend has been wanting me to write a poem for her for so long, but I can never quite put what she wants into words. Amazingly, you knew exactly what she wanted and she loved it. so, Thanks!
                          Joy  

thebeautybrat
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since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
7 posted 2000-08-24 09:17 PM


beautiful work!! i absolutely loved it!! and you should definitely give your friend the address!! the more the merrier!! *hehe*

Love is the greatest feeling of all...but heartbreak is the worst feeling you can imagine.


Acies
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8 posted 2000-10-22 04:34 PM


very lovely poem.  I like your repetitous style, it made the poem more interesting.  Great job. keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Dopey Dope
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9 posted 2000-10-22 08:30 PM


All i can say is great job and did you ever see the answers to your questions i gave you girl?
if not......damn!
if so.......oK!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
10 posted 2000-10-23 08:17 AM


Thanks much ya all for replying!!!

Dopey:Nah, I never found the answers. Am I ever gonna know???


Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Monica Ash
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 17

11 posted 2000-10-23 06:14 PM


That was a good poem really liked it!!!!Check out my poem The search has ended(To Tamma.O)and tell me what you think please!!!!
Monica

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