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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Nothing really matters until you are dead Maybe I should have listened to what my friends and family said Whenever I was around people I had to act all tough And now that I look back that's what made my life so rough It never mattered to me if what I was doing was right But now my life is over it all ended in just one night That night I was at a party with a bunch of my friends There was no way I could have known my life was about to end Someone got mad and decided to shoot off their gun The bullet hit me and now my life is done There is nothing I can do now except ask myself why And tell you to turn your life around because you dont really want to die! Lauren This is the first poem I've posted in awhile I guess I just didn't feel like my peoms were and good! |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Lauren, Let me just tell you right now that your poems ARE good.  This was a great poem that was very well written about an important subject. Thank you for posting it. Angel Don't mess with the bull, young man. You'll get the horns. ~*Guardian of Light*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
lauren~~~this poem is really good...just like angel said this is an important subject...dont think that you arent any good...if people dont like your poems oh well...its your work...and you should be proud that its YOURS...nobody elses opinion should matter but yours...this is a place where we can go to share our work...and show people our feelings and work...so next time you think your works not good...remember this is just a place to share it!!!< !signature--> ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I dont share my poetry with anyone so nobody thinks it's bad except for me Erin.Anyway thankyou to the 2 people who actually replied. Lauren |
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ShUgArHiGh Junior Member
since 2000-08-24
Posts 24 |
I thought that poem expressed a serious subject very well. It was a great poem and its beyond me as to why u think ur poems are bad! I hope to see more poems from u, i think their great =o) |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I think this poem has a message so i'm bumping it back up. Lauren |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Nicely written TopGunLauren ... I'm glad to see you back! This is a sad tale that too often happens when in the heat of anger, a life is lost. It does contain a good message, nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Lauren, nicely done. Such a sad tale though, glad to see you back! Keep writing! ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey!! I'm going thro the EXACT same thing LOL Ive been trying to get myself motivated to write but i just can't~! But this was really good, so keep up the great work~! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
What are ya talking about?! You write beautiful poetry. I like the unique style you use...through another persons eyes and about tough situations in a teen's life. I can never do that. My poetry is too emotional. That's why I am only inspired when I feel something different. The nice thing about yours, is that your inspired by anything around you and you can talk it and speak through a person's dead body. That's hard to do, but you do it well. Keep writing and sharing. Don't ever think anything you write isn't good enough. It's the touch you give it that makes your pieces grand! Salma |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
A few more than two after all, huh? I have to admit, this is the first of your work I’ve seen, but I like it. I suggest you take a look in the mirror and ask yourself whom you see… Yourself or someone like you? ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time “Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Bump! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this poem, it's an interesting point of view. Great writing! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Bump! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
bump |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
bump! |
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