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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 271


0 posted 2000-08-23 11:34 PM


Here's a little poem i wrote quickly one day.  I don't really care to share the details but have a read and see what you think.

allow my heart to speek
i wish to be washed clean
the blood that stains me
drains me without a care
why can't you listen
hear the words cried out!

allow me to touch your ear
with metephors of love's life
let it sink in and stay there
please remember me i beg you still
i loathe that day and always will

it'll never be the same
but i pray you never forget me
or ponder on what i lack
because i'm leaving,
and never coming back
--Hoppy

6/20/00

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
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1 posted 2000-08-24 12:00 PM


Hmm...this one relates to me in a way but I don't think it's quite the same as you. But anyway, great poem....I could feel the depth in it.

                                Angel


Don't mess with the bull, young man. You'll get the horns.

~*Guardian of Light*~


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-08-24 01:07 PM


"because im leaving, and never coming back"...i love it...that was a good line you used...keep up the good work...i cant wait to see more!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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