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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
You drive me crazy You make my pulse rase You turn me 'round You make my soul bleed I feel like heaven when Iam with you I feel like there is nothing that I couldn't do I feel asthough this was meant to be I feel that for some reason you don't want to be with me Your eyes conspire me Your attitude never leaves me jaded Your smile always makes me wonder Your words always make me feel lascivious Tell me why your interests in me are so unbalanced Tell me why you hide yourself from me Tell me why you disguise your feelings for me with ignorance Tell me why you are afraid to love me [This message has been edited by TrueLUV (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
tureluv~~~good poem...but you say in the last line "tell me why you are afraid to love me"...maybe its cuz shes scared to get close to you...i mean thats how i am...i am scared to get close to people...cuz of some so called "friends" that i had...just dont try to hard...maybe thats what it is... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I agree with ERIN. Maybe yu are trying to hard, and she is scared. Just take your time, and everything will work out. stay cool  ~~Lavada~~  "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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JR Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22morris il |
I like it. very expressing and deep yet it still gets the point accross in a simple manner.keep up the writing. --JR "two roads diverged in a wood and I... I took the one less traveled by... ...And that has made all of the difference." --Robert Frost |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The really like the repition you used here, it keeps focusing you in on the point. This is a great poem  |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
Hi! I think this is a wounderful poem and I think you did a great job. keep up the great work. I hope tp read more of your work. Lovely_Kris |
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