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JR
Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22
morris il

0 posted 2000-08-21 03:26 PM


the other day is not a love poem or a love lost poem its just about life.

The other day

The other day it was there,
this feeling I couldn't hide,
now today its gone,but i don't
know where or why.

If you seen me the other day
you would understand.
I hope you can help me find it.
I just dont understand...

Quite where it went, you see,
it just sorta disapeared,
I knew it would eventualy,
but its something I always feared.

Now I'll spend my time finding it,
time is irrelevent anyways.
I don't care how long it takes,
I will find it one of these days.

The other day I laughed a lot,
now all I do is cry.
If you seen me the other day,
you'd prabably ask me why...

I'm crying now?  Not too much has changed,
but the other day I had it,
now I don't.
My freedom.
               --JR


"two roads diverged in a wood and I...
I took the one less traveled by...
...And that has made all of the difference."
--Robert Frost

© Copyright 2000 JR - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-08-21 06:44 PM


This is very well written, it's kind of suspensful waiting to see what has changed.  Keep up the awesome poetry!
Emmaline
Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15

2 posted 2000-08-21 10:52 PM


JR ~ I really liked this poem!  I, too, liked the suspense.  As I was reading it, I didn't know what you were saying had disapeared.  I could make all this guesses, like your innocence.  I like that I could do that.  I like how whoever reads it can form their own thoughts, and at the end, can come to the realisation.  Good work. ~ Emma
Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
3 posted 2000-08-22 03:56 AM


well...here's somethin' I've never read of yer's before...but as it always goes, I know what I like and what I don't...and this...I like...keep it flowin man.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

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