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IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
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0 posted 2000-08-21 03:09 PM



I'm sick of this roller coaster they call life
This ride never gets very high
but it gets so low it's like a twisting nife

and it's the ones in I love that shuv it in my  gut
So whose going to stop the bleeding
It's a disturbing thaught and I tried to keep my eyes shut

but it didn't work even when I did
the pain is so intence
it shines right through my eye lids

but I opened my eyes I seen  it all
Decete, greed, hate
if you only new half the things I saw

I think I've hit the bottom now
so I need to change directions
but I have no idea how

this roller coaster falls so fast
and climbs so slow
leaving in my head the recent  past

but when it peeks, it doesn't last
but maybe this hill
maybe this one, will be the last

© Copyright 2000 IsGona - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-08-21 06:27 PM


Life is full of ups and downs and you've expressed that so well.  I really felt the pain behind this one.  I hope this hill is a very high one for you
Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-08-22 10:39 AM


This is a very interesting topic.  Maybe I can help you out.  How about How Life is Percieved.  Or something like that.  I hope that you find a title.  Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-08-22 06:44 PM


isgona~~~good work..i agree with lakewalker you expressed the ups and downs of life perfectly...keep up the good work!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

4 posted 2000-08-22 09:33 PM


Thank you for reading my poem.  I was having a very rough week and I wrote this poem w/ tears in my eyes last night but today was so beutiful.  I think things are turning around

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-08-23 07:04 AM


You've expressed your turmoil of ups and downs well IsGona. Sometimes, just recognizing that there are good days amongst the bad, is the boost we need to help turn it around. Very nicely expressed, and I enjoyed your optomism for better days ahead!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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