navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » My Life Spins
Teen Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic My Life Spins Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

0 posted 2000-08-21 07:49 AM


I wake up
The world is upside down
Why, I don't know
How do you make it right?
I turn to you for an answer
To see the world in circles
Cars speed right by
Lights change everywhere
Music blaring
Police speeding
Sirens everywhere
Slowing down
Before I leave
My life is spinning around in my head
Because of you
My life spins


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

© Copyright 2000 Michelle Y. Plocinik - All Rights Reserved
Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-08-21 11:58 AM


i like it chel!!!it seems like it is real...like i can see it, and hear the noise...good work!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Lovely_Kris
Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

2 posted 2000-08-21 04:09 PM


wounderful poem and I think you did a great job on this one. I hope to read more of your work and keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-08-21 06:45 PM


This is very well done, thanks for sharing it
Emmaline
Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15

4 posted 2000-08-21 10:40 PM


Chel ~ Great job on this poem!  I really liked your word choices - simple yet right to the point.  It gave a feeling of "spinning" in confusion.  I hope to read more soon. ~ Emma
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » My Life Spins

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary