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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~

0 posted 2000-08-21 02:35 AM


***ok i would really appreciate it if i could get some help with a title for this one...i couldnt think of one...please help...


One day you decided,
to open this certain door.
A door where no one,
has ever been before.

As you grew the courage,
to turn the knob to the door.
You gaind curiousity,
cause you wanted to explore.

You walked through the door,
so intense with fear.
As you looked around,
you wondered why no one ever went there.

It was so beautiful,
such a amazing place.
You didnt know why,
someone would look past this space.

You wanted to look around,
there was so much more.
But you had to go,
cause you found what you were looking for.

You had to do as the instructions said,
look for a box, inside is a key.
If you find this box,
please bring it back to me.

So you brought it back,
the key to my heart.
Where now my life with you,
was able to start.

I just want to tell you,
thank you for finding the key.
As I put your love up for a challenge,
to see if you were made for me.


~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
1 posted 2000-08-21 07:52 AM


Hey Erin,
   Great poem.  I really enjoyed reading it.  Let me see if I can help with that title...The Door that Brought Love to Me!
What do you think.  Well keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

2 posted 2000-08-21 09:41 AM


Ah Erin, I must say this is absouulty beautiful! I loved it! Title: "The Key to My Heart" is kinda plain, "That Hidden Place" I'm not too great with titles....

Salooma

Erin
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Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-08-21 11:55 AM


Chel~~~thanks for the reply i really appreciate it...by the way i like the title that you suggested...

Salooma~~~thanks you for trying to help me with a title...and thanks for replying i really appreciate it...


~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-08-21 06:20 PM


Well the others covered the title help, so I'll just tell you that this is great!  I didn't know where you were going with it at first but then I got a nice surprise, it's so sweet.  Thanks for sharing it
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-08-21 11:01 PM


lakewalker~~~im not really sure what i want to call this one...so thanks for the reply!!!!!i wasnt really sure where it was going either till i got deeper into it...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


DancinQueen
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6 posted 2000-08-21 11:50 PM


Hey babe! hmm...how about "The Key to My Heart" or hmm...The Key To My Love, something like that. But this was great! very heart-felt. Keep up the great work!  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-08-22 12:52 PM


DQ~~~i dont want to call it the key to my heart cuz i read poems with that title already...but i like the key to my love...sounds really good...thanks for the help and your reply!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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