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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-08-21 12:37 PM


the old man says i talk to much
(while pinning me to the wall)
whisper i am practicing (the downfall of you all)

his laugh fills the room,and i smell desperate intoxication(the courage to fall)

he's thinking this worlds the solution(hes a matter of decay)

     and  
          i read the/peeling/feeling screaming
          
              sailing motion in the eyes

hes a picture of the future )turned inside and clutching your beast ..

and breaking it over his knees

i swear he's a savior// you swear hes the end

swearing never got us anywhere
               //  but thanks for leetting him in




"you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings
you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything"

"so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything"

"I am too connected to you to
Slip away, to fade away.
Days away I still feel you
Touching me, changing me,
And considerately killing me."

The Jackal


© Copyright 2000 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-08-21 02:17 AM


wow i have never thought of pollution like that...you did a really good job...i feel like i am speechless...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-08-21 08:15 AM


Hey there, great poem, it made me think about pollution and what it really is about.  Nice work, keep it up.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-21 09:09 AM


I must say jackle, this is definatly wonderful piece...i have to agree with Erin, I never looked at polution that way before. Nice to have you back again!

Salooma

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-08-21 06:04 PM


This is very well done, thanks for sharing it!
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