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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2000-08-21 12:03 PM


~*Falling Too Fast*~


I thought I met,
the guy in my dreams.
He was virtually perfect,
atleast thats how it seems.

I knew my heart,
was falling way to fast.
But i kept telling myself,
this is going to last.

He loves me I said,
or so i thought.
It was his love,
that my heart so hungerly sought.

I guess the feeling wasn't mutual,
because now im all alone.
I tell myself, "he's going to call!"
as i sit all day clinging to the phone.

It's been 2 weeks,
since I last heard your voice; felt your touch.
The sparkle in my eyes is gone,
I'm missing you so much.

I set myself up for a heartbreak,
there's no one else to blame.
I was falling too fast,
now I'll never be the same.

**I happen to do this alot, fall to fast. This really isnt a good poem either lol i bet u guys are getting tired of these krappy ones. sorry! i just write whats on my mind, sometimes in a hurry. but i'll write a good one here shortly!  

© Copyright 2000 Kiley - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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1 posted 2000-08-21 02:22 AM


DQ~~~you work is not crappy at all...i love your poems...hey even if poetry isnt your thing it doesnt matter...i know it isnt my things its just i like it...we all arent perfect and all of our poetry isnt perfect..anyways girl this is a good poem!!!i like it...just next time you get a new guy let him do the falling!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Lovely_Kris
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2 posted 2000-08-21 04:40 PM


wounderful poem! I think you did a great job and keep up the great work. I hope to read more of your work and by the way your work isn't crappy. keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-08-21 06:41 PM


You're very good at expressing your feelings, and that's all it takes to make good poetry.  I loved this one, thanks for the chance to read it
DancinQueen
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4 posted 2000-08-21 10:52 PM


HEY GUYS! Thanks so much for replying! I swear ya'll are so POSITIVE! LOL i know ure just dying to say something negative   But thanks for the support! Luv ya'll


~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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5 posted 2000-09-19 12:07 PM


this is actually a great write.  why do you sell yourself short. i'd be the first to say if i don't like it, believe me   keep writing and i promise to keep reading

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2000-09-19 09:09 AM


I agree with the others DancinQueen ... don't sell yourself short! This is well written, with a good flow and rhythm. You're quite talented, so keep up the good work!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

TAP2
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7 posted 2000-09-19 11:30 AM


Been in your shoes before, and on the other side of the phone, the one you were waiting on. Neither side is pleasant to be on, your side the least. Let love find you, don't seek it.

Thomas A. Plemmons

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

DancinQueen
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8 posted 2000-09-19 04:43 PM


acire! I didnt know you bumped this one, too! thank you so much u r so sweet

Kit~~>i guess i'm just really criticle of my work

TAP2~~> well im trying not to seek it..i wish it'd find me quicker!


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

StarPryncess17
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9 posted 2000-09-19 05:48 PM


I loved it!! You are way too critical!! You are quite talented and I for one can say this is excellent.It's nice to see you again. Keep writin 'em and I'll keep readin 'em!   < !signature-->

   If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.  



[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-19-2000).]

Isabel Galaxia
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10 posted 2000-09-19 06:53 PM


Really, it's not crappy, only you think that.  Well, as to your situation I can't give much advice, other than there will be other guys.  Don't you just love that one?  It makes no sense at the time, but I guess it does later aye?  Keep your chin up and keep writing
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

DancinQueen
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11 posted 2000-09-19 08:09 PM


Oh wow guys!! I posted these poems forever ago..and acire bumped them all. thanks so much everyone..means alot to have you reply!  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

curlygurly
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12 posted 2000-09-19 08:52 PM


i feel ur pain, i know exactly what u r feeling, or what u r expressing in ur poem. i got hurt the same way, and trust me ur pain isn't near what mine was, or what i was privelleged to. keep smiling and trust me, eventually u will move on and hate him!
DancinQueen
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13 posted 2000-09-19 10:11 PM


Oh i've felt ALOT more pain...i've written a couple other poems that express that very well. thanks for the kind words  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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