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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27
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0 posted 2000-08-20 10:37 PM


I have finally wrote another poem.  I have had some serious mental blocks and hadn't been able to write anything but i think this one is decent.  See what yout ink


Days, minutes, seconds fly by
i wonder around at the way side
the smiles and laughter without a care
i see past their lies but do i dare
tempted to open blinded eyes
but i realize that we live our lies
despite i set a mission from now till then
right now it starts, right now i begin
without a clue where to start or go
i can't explain how this will work, i just know
set back and tell me i will fail
i've heard it before, though i will prevail
darkened is my heart from what i see
the lies we live with such zelous glee
please take to heart these of mine
look at your watch, you're almost out of time

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

1 posted 2000-08-20 10:47 PM


I think you did a nice job on this poem. I hope to read more of your poem.
lovely_Kris

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
2 posted 2000-08-20 10:55 PM


This was great, it's very well written.  I think it's the first I've read by you, and I can't wait to read more
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-08-21 01:53 AM


hoppy~~~good to see you back!!!this is good...keep up the good work!!!hope that this writers block passes...by the way PoetdeVine post some things in the Teen Explorer that might help you...i know it helped me!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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