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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-08-20 09:50 AM



I want you no longer, I proclaim,
as you call to me, you scream my name.
I feel the time is here, say our goodbyes,
get rid of our all our lies.

You leave me then and come back around,
spinning me in viscious circles of pain and frowns.
I wish you'd leave and yet you stay,
All I want is you.... to go away!

We make no sense you and I,
yet you talk about her, and I nearly cry.
The guy I remember being oh so close to me,
is now holding another, and this other, it is she.

I am confused nine times out of ten,
when it's over, oh no, it's started again.
Why do I get jealous, this is what needs to be?
Sometimes I wish it wasn't her, but me.



* tell me what you think.... am I nuts or what?

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 08-20-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-08-20 01:44 PM


Jenn,
As much as it pains me to say it, sc--w this guy. He's obviously not good for you and you don't deserve to be hurt over and over again.
Beautiful poem.

Thomas

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

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2 posted 2000-08-20 07:15 PM


I agree. The worst is only yet to come if don't just grow up...right? Thank you.
Jenn

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3 posted 2000-08-20 07:53 PM


You've done a great job of expressing your emotions here, I enjoyed the poem. I agree with Thomas on this one.  Keep writing great poems!
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4 posted 2000-08-21 07:58 AM


Jenn, I think that this was well written and expressed a lot of emotion.  You don't deserve to be hurt, its not right.  You are doing the right thing by letting him go, but you have to tell him that its really over or he is just going to keep coming back to tell you these things.  You will know if it is right or not.  If you want to talk about this more just email me.

Chel



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"True love last forever"

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5 posted 2000-08-21 11:36 AM


If you were considered nuts then this world would be running around with nuts just like you    This is so typical and I see it everyday it isn't even funny anymore.  The poem is nicely expressed and as for the situation...my dvice is to simply cut it off and show him that you can survive without him. You need to show him that life still will continue for you and that he is not running it whenever he wants to.  However it's easier said then done.  I know that it hurts a lot    Try to find yourself a new man to get your mind off him, because it seems that he has found himself a new lady...but thats just what I think...be well and just stay strong  

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



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6 posted 2000-08-22 04:41 PM


wounderful poem. I think you did a great job expressing your feeling. Just be strong and I have to agree jnR4eva You should find someone new and I know there is someone out there who will care for ya and will not break your heart and will not make you jealous. I hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

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7 posted 2000-08-23 07:35 PM


Thank you, it helps a lot to have people read and reply to what I write... this is who I am... every side of me in each poem I write.
Jenn

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8 posted 2000-08-23 11:41 PM


I understand this completely Jenn, because I was in the same sort of situation...the best thing that ever happened to me is when we broke up.  But hey, every situation is different.  Wonderful, heartfelt work, keep it up!  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

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9 posted 2000-08-23 11:51 PM


Oh im feelin ya on this one babe! I JUST did this with my last relationship. I knew we needed to breakup, and when we did i found myself still thinking about him wishing we were together and i got so mad at myself cause i was trying so hard to not like it. The only medicine in this situation is time

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~Carol King

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10 posted 2001-05-03 07:32 PM


the wording in this poem was truly beautiful..
i really liked this one..
great poem jenn..cya~

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11 posted 2001-05-15 10:14 PM


Oh breaks up are hard.  I imagine this is in the past now, but I ohpe you don't feel this way anymore.  I loved the poem Jenn

Jason

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12 posted 2001-12-10 11:17 AM


Wow Jenn. This is one of the strongest pieces I believe you've ever written. Well apart from that one the other day about Mr X.  

"All I want is you.... to go away!"

Now THAT is a line not easily forgotten! You are such an intelligent writer Jenn with oodles of potential. I am glad you're still writing and sharing everything with us.  

~AF~

"When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West

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