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JR
Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22
morris il

0 posted 2000-08-19 07:23 PM


I'm kinda new in here.  I used to write a lot and I'm trying to get back into it.

A moment

First i see your perfect face,
Then my heart begins to race,
Now I know I've found my place.
In your arms for a moment.

I wish that this would never end,
This time I've spent with my bestfriend.
I must go my heart will mend
When I leave for a moment.

You're a thief, you stole my heart.
I think of you when we're apart.
My life is changed you've made a mark.
My heart is yours for a moment.

Please don't go and leave me here,
Wishing you were somewhere near.
Being alone is my only fear,
Stay with me for a moment.

I guess there's nothing i can do;
I'm hoppelessly in love with you.
Tell me that you love me too,
Love me for a moment.

Jason S. Roethlisberger

© Copyright 2000 JR - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-08-19 07:33 PM


Welcome to Passions
I really enjoyed this poem, it flowed well and tells your emotions wonderfully.  I can't wait to read more of your poems!

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-08-19 08:19 PM


~*~Welcome to Passions~*~i hope that you enjoy it here as much as i do!!!good poem...looks like you just opened your mind and let everything come out!!!cant wait to see more...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Tamma
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV
3 posted 2000-08-19 09:07 PM


Welcome !!  
So much can happen in a moment! I believe that I may have a few of my own poems about what can happen in a moment floating around here at Passions. This was a wonderful first post, and I hope to see many more

~*~*~Tamma~*~*~


If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.


jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
4 posted 2000-08-19 10:42 PM


That was nice, it was very well worded and specific, sometimes moments can make something that will evolve into something bigger and better, good luck in the future to come!

,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_.,



"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

sweetstuff101
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
5 posted 2000-08-20 12:19 PM


Great poem!! that was awesome, keep up the great work!

Luv,
   ~*~sweetstuff~*~


~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~



kimmy
Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98

6 posted 2000-08-21 03:27 AM


i loved this poem...it was really good..i hope you write more poems like this..it sounded really sweet...
buttercup411
Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41
miami, fl, u.s
7 posted 2000-08-21 04:35 PM


uhhh lord love.... been in love it's beautifull but sometimes that person might not feel the same but a moment of their love, a simple moment can mean so much.....great poem...keep it up... and welocome 2 passions

!@##)*(^&*+)_<><:"~^*&#@
sometimes i stand, sometimes i sit...
i never know what there is to know..
i never could write a poem..
: )

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
8 posted 2000-08-21 05:29 PM


Hey there, let me start by saying WELCOME to Passions!!!!  I hope that you enjoy it here.  I want to also thak you for reponding to my poem.  This piece of work was very well written and thought out.  Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Lovely_Kris
Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

9 posted 2000-08-22 04:25 PM


Hi!! Welcome to passions and I think you wrote a great and wounderful poem and I really enjoyed reading this poem. Keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
10 posted 2000-08-23 12:05 PM


Hey!   Oh that was so awesome. I really liked it. I want to read more. Mail me sometime cause I'd like to talk to you: KileyRk84@aol.com Great job keep it up!!

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
11 posted 2000-08-23 07:29 AM


Welcome to Passions JR!

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family!

This is a wonderful first post Jason, very nice expression!

I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
12 posted 2000-08-23 10:28 AM


welcome to passions!!! Awesome writing...very heart felt. Hope to see more of your works in the future

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
13 posted 2000-08-24 02:35 AM


Well it was an awsome poem and I used to post poems on here too tell they screwed me over.Keep up the awsome work.
   Lauren

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