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Just When I Thought I Was Over You
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Just When I Thought I Was Over You |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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~*Just When I Thought I Was Over You*~ We used to be in love, you completed me. But now we parted, i was left so lost and empty. I try to hold on, but I need to let go. I'm trying so hard; fighting the urge, I just need to tell my heart no. I'm standing so strong, you're soo in the past. I feel alive and confident, i'm moving on quite fast. Then I see it, and it takes my breathe away. My heart stops beating, I don't know what to say. You're perfect smile, it makes me melt. The sparkle in your eyes, brings back the feelings i once felt. This can't be happening, I was so over you. I tell myself to stay strong, but i'm so weak; if you only knew. I'm sorry for all I've done wrong, but I can't change the past. Just give me one more chance, and I promise I'll make it last. **Mmmk..well this was just somethin i threw together while i was bored lol so go ahead and tear it apart cause i know its not one of my best. But this is something ive done in the past and then i kicked myself for blaming myself for everything that HE did to me and blah blah..you get the idea  Thanks![This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~~~i would love to see a poem that took you a long time to write...girl this is perfect...it is really good...i give you 2 thumbs up for it...dont you just hate it when stuff like this happens???listen to the advice that you give others...its your advice so listen to it!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
This is a beautiful poem I am an old woman and i am facing the same demon monique |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
DON'T DO IT GIRL!!!! Yer talkin to an extremely wise person here and I beg of you not to do this to yourself. You seem like a really nice person and it would break my heart to hear of you making this mistake....just let the past be the past. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Meladorri Junior Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 14Indianapolis, IN |
I loved your poem! I know your heart speaks louder than your mind, but most often that not your mind is much smarter and more experienced than your heart. Give it time before you go back. *don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened* |
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Lurdburger Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 39Carlisle, Cumbria, England |
I know the feeling, and you've expressed it well here. Keep up the good work! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I couldn't have said it better myself. I understand what it feels like to blame yourself for everything he has done. And it doesn't help when he's drilling such an idea into you, huh? Good work, luv the poem! Jenn |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, your really did a great job of putting these thoughts into words. Great poem  |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Loved it im going thru it now, but not with an ex, ya see, the guy im dating now, well ive known him for 10 months and fell for him the first night, be fore i got the chance to tell him, he disappeared but afew weeks ago, he popped back into my life and i finally got my chance. If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Personally, I dont think you should make the past future, I wouldnt reminisce about the past but rather do something with what you can control, and that is the present. I hope you pull through and do what feels right, great poem! Love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., "I will know where I'm headed, cause I'm so tired of the suffering I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection" ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
HEY! WOW Thanks for all the input it was awesome. thanks again!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Fairy Princess Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 64Fitchburg Ma, USA |
GoOd JoB, oN yOuR pOeM I tHiNk It WaS nIcE ~*~FaIrY pRiNcEsS~*~ |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think you did a great job and I love this poem. I hope to read more of your poems and keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
WoW! I love you guys! You're so awesome. You're comments keep me going sometimes. Thanks!! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This poem makes me so curoius Kiley. Hmmmm. What did you do that was so bad? Overall, you know I always love your poems I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Seems acire is just bumping all these old poems back up. Eneh Weh, great poem and hope to see more!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire you are such a sweetheart! I dont think there are anymore of my poems you havent bumped!! but this is one of my favorites..thank you so much <3 ya always~* Kiley< !signature--> "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey!! I liked this poem a lot!! Dont ya hate it when your finally over that one guy and then he does something that makes everything you've worked up to vanish!? Ughh...guys...cant live with em, cant live without em =o) Awesome poem!!!! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ShugarHigh~ hi!! thanks for replying. and i think u summed it up quite nicely..cant live with them, cant live without them thanks again!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Hey!! That was awesome!! I loved it!! I know exaclty how that feels tho. It's not easy. Well great poem, keep writing!! I look forward to reading more from you soon!!! Luv, SweetStuff ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
sweetstuff~ hey! thanks so much for replying, yeah i think we can all relate to this in one way or another thanks again!!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
DQ boy u sure summed it all up well! This is an awesome poem i've been going thru the same thing with my ex for the past year and ..... 6 months now! Every time i'm about to get over him he'll call me , or i'll see him and he'll look me in my eyes and flash me that smile , and i'm done for ! Pretty pitiful huh! But this poem just totally .. Wow I think if it's alright with u i'm gonna send it to him. keep up the good work really i can't wait to see more of your poetry! [This message has been edited by thug-a-licious (edited 10-24-2000).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thug-a-licious~> thats a cute name btw but neways..well im so glad this poem relates to you, and best of luck with getting over him hehe its pretty hard sometimes!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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