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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-08-18 12:36 PM


I know...I've been writing short lil' poems lately...but I'll come around.

What Breeze May Come

Slow breeze with soothing chills;
breaking the heat of hate.
Whispering softly in your ear
tales of love and fate.
These tales take the mind away
from lifes reality.
If fate is love and love is fate,
I pray that breeze flows free.

Harsh winds of change then rise.
They swirl about in storms.
Tearing gaps in all that's known-
leaving loss and mourn.
The morning comes, we mourn the things
that change hath made undone.
If this is but the fate for me,
I damn what breeze may come!

Jeremy D. Halstead  8-17-00


"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

© Copyright 2000 Jeremy D. Halstead - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-08-18 01:46 AM


jeremy~~~you know how much i love your work...so stand up and take a bow as we all clap for this beautiful poem you wrote...keep up the GOOD work buddy!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
2 posted 2000-08-18 02:12 AM


Wow* I seem to use that word alot when i reply to your poetry hehe This was beautiful. And if i understood it right (chances are i didnt cause im dumb like that) but my comment is..and i dont know if this makes sense but here it goes lol..drum roll please JUST KIDDING!   Newho.. its amazing that all that love and heartbreak can come in with the breeze one day and go out with the breeze the next. Make sense? I hope cause i had to read this like 5 times to get it lol im so pathetic! Ok i;m rambling! SORRY!! <3 always

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-08-18 06:13 AM


Exquisite Jeremy ... a beautiful flow, and throught-provoking sentiments. Really enjoyed this!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lurdburger
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 39
Carlisle, Cumbria, England
4 posted 2000-08-18 06:29 AM


Brilliant, just brilliant.
TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
5 posted 2000-08-18 11:56 AM


Jeremy

Life is all that life will be
Be it for love or eternity
But look each day in the eye and take it not in part but the whole in sum
What ever breeze may come

Loved every line. Inspirational and undefineable by mere tongue or key.

Thomas A. Plemmons

[This message has been edited by TAP2 (edited 08-18-2000).]

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

6 posted 2000-08-18 01:02 PM


awww....wow  

"The morning comes, we mourn the things
that change hath made undone.
If this is but the fate for me,
I damn what breeze may come!"

i loved that powerful ending...i think it's pretty sad, but tell me if I am wrong! this was beautiful as always jeremy....u've got great talent....keep your pen flowing!

salooma


StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
7 posted 2000-08-18 04:55 PM


AS ALWAYS Jeremy, absolutely wonderful! YOu are so very talented and I would like to borrow it ok? hehe Keep it up kid! Love ya bunches *hugs and kisses* Love Always~*~Jess~*~

~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
8 posted 2000-08-19 07:22 PM


Jeremy, I really liked it.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
9 posted 2000-08-19 10:30 PM


Uhm, I cant add to the praise, this was incredible. Well explained and expressed!

,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_.,



"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
10 posted 2000-08-20 06:50 PM


Another great one jeremy, thanks for the chance to read it
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