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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2000-08-17 12:35 PM


Struggling with my answers found,
I pick my feet up off the ground.
fighting to accept the truth,
the sun has lost it's enternal youth.
So now the earth is dark and bare,
no plants or animals anywhere.
How essintal to surrive,
without something totally alive.
It decides our future and our place,
and nurishes the earth's face.
As I the only human left,
wander through the darked depth.
To see what lies ahed, behind,
and discover all that is not mine.

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How's that? a little short, but I tried.
Allysa


Now follow me and do
exactly what you see.
Don't you wanna grow
up to be just like me?
~Eminem~
(Role Model)

It's rock bottom. when life make

© Copyright 2000 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Lurdburger
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 39
Carlisle, Cumbria, England
1 posted 2000-08-17 02:45 PM


I like this; it's the most original reply to Lakewalker's challenge I've seen so far! Keep writing!
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
2 posted 2000-08-17 03:34 PM


Very creative, you certainly passed my challenge   Great poem!
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair
3 posted 2000-08-17 11:20 PM


Lovely, great inturpretation of this challenge, you certainly rose to the moment. great job!

love,
jeremydraul

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
4 posted 2000-08-22 08:32 AM


Thanks for replying,
Erin
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~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-08-22 11:09 AM


allysa~~~you did a good job with that...i tried and tried but i couldnt do it...congrats to you for doing it and for doing a good job!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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