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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
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Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-08-17 04:34 AM


Well...I know it's doesn't rhyme...but we all know that poetry doesn't have to ryhme...anyways, read on.

Lovely Fragments

Oh, blessed past.
These shattered pieces about me
resemble lovely things.

Oh, blessed days.
What of beauty could these be...
broken as they are?!

Broked, bleeding bits..
yet they seem so meant to fit.
Were they once a love?

Speak the truth to me.
My heart and her's once seemed to fit
as these lovely fragments.

Jeremy Halstead  8-17-00
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"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."


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ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
1 posted 2000-08-17 06:27 AM


Jeremy; this exquisite poem of love lost, is called "free verse".  You did a magnifivent job, it flows like a dream. ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

Acies
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2 posted 2000-08-17 09:58 AM


Lovely poem....I would have loved it to be a bit longer though....I was si into it already.  Great writing

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-08-17 11:49 PM


Very nicely done, I really enjoyed this.
DancinQueen
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4 posted 2000-08-18 02:26 AM


Well lol i really dont know what to say. You amaze me more everytime i read a new poem!   Keep up the great work

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
5 posted 2000-08-18 12:01 PM


Jeremy,
Nice to see you expanding your horizons. This was a beautiful piece. Very descriptive and picturesque.

Thomas

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

6 posted 2000-08-18 12:59 PM


wonderful poem jeremy as always....doesn't have to rhyme as long it comes from your heart which obviously this did....beautiful work, maybe you shouldn't rhyme more often.

Salooma

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
7 posted 2000-08-18 05:06 PM


Once yet again, you have captured my heart and every corresponding part. You have such an outstanding talent here, I wish that this too I could bare. But instead I shall take advantage of the limited talent I have, And do my best to do what I can. Keep it up my dear! Miss ya! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

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