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I was hoping... (inspired by Alanis)
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I was hoping... (inspired by Alanis) |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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I was hoping....(inspired by Alanis Morrissette's song) Sometimes I look into your eyes and see what could have been, The funny way you look at me in response, I can see it's not the same. I want to hold you close to me but I've woken up and then, I've realized all I was to you was just a silly game. I know I sometimes tried too hard, to be just what you needed, But in the end it was plain to see, you expected way too much from me. All those times I thought you were, just what I was hoping for, you were not, thus the side of my curb you greeted. Kicked you out, away from me, and it turns out, you were just another heartache, multiplied by three. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey I really liked this and i'm glad i'm bumping it back to the top because its really good. I like Alanis, too  This was awesome. Keep up the great work!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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HerMelness Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 37Bridgewater, NS, Canada |
Amazing! This is a wonderful poem, I've felt this way many a time, I love your form of expression, in each and every one of your poems! Best line: "it turns out, you were just another heartache, multiplied by three." Fabulous! -Wherever you go, go with all your heart.- |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thank you again for the response... I'm gettin' nostalgia here! Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
hey that was great! And it really got me thinking about a situation I am currently in. Very beatifully done! Keep writing! Luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey! This poem rocked! I can definately relate to it and it really explains how you feel when your in a situation like that! Good job! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is really good, I love being inspired by someone else's work as you were by Alanis' music. Great job |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jenn~ Its good that you had something to inspire you to write this...It was really good...I dont know why love feels so good in the beginning...But then goes really bad in the end...Anyways thanks for sharing this...2 thumbs up for you!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hello......good....good....and good. I liked it a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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