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Lurdburger
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 39
Carlisle, Cumbria, England

0 posted 2000-08-16 12:46 PM


I guess you've noticed
The way I linger on your touch.
I shouldn't, we're finished, although I don't want to believe that.
But when our touch meets,
My hands are taken by force,
The glimmer of hope in my heart
And the memory of your lost touch
Overthrow my sensibilities.
My hands remember
My fingers remember
And try to reclaim your embrace.

I guess you've noticed
The way I linger on your touch.
I can't help it, my hand remembers
The love and comfort that your hand provides.
I have to fight to stop myself.
But afterwards, the light in my heart asks;
"Did she feel the same?"
And I wonder if you wanted to take my hand,
Just as I wanted to take yours.

© Copyright 2000 Andy Lawson - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-08-16 02:11 PM


These are great romantic thoughts that you've so wonderfully put into words.  I really like the end:

But afterwards, the light in my heart asks;
"Did she feel the same?"
And I wonder if you wanted to take my hand,
Just as I wanted to take yours

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

2 posted 2000-08-16 07:45 PM


oh gosh...this is sweet! to think it's only a touch and you've developed it into a beautiful poem. it's also nice to think that guys do feel like we do...as you said, "linger on a touch.." very nicely writ!

salooma

SweetPoet17
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

3 posted 2000-08-16 11:24 PM


that was really sweet hun.
-jessica-

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4 posted 2000-08-17 10:23 AM


It never really sinks into my mind how good you guys are.  I'm always amazed at the things i read in passions.  Keep up the good work

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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