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jennie may*
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 122


0 posted 2000-08-16 03:23 AM


I want to write
a love poem

and think of you

I don't want to
hate you
anymore

no more red flames
in my face

I want to feel your
brown eyes
and thick fingers
and my heart
losing control
all at once

I want to
run into you
one autumn day
and
not feel a
lump
in my throat

I want to tell you
I love you
one more time.

I need to wake up
in January

and realize this
endless time
without you

was all a dream...

© Copyright 2000 jennie may* - All Rights Reserved
GodsPerfktAngel
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28
Ohio
1 posted 2000-08-16 11:22 AM


This is very sad! I hope this didnt happen to you!!!! anyway ,good job and try and make it rhyme a lil!
       good job

Jocelyn M. Cosgray


~*you cannot hold back a laugh any more than you can a tide,both are forces of nature*~

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
2 posted 2000-08-16 02:18 PM


I like this just the way it is, it's a great show of emotion.  Very well done!
Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-16 07:21 PM


ah very sweet and i loved the ending....keep these coming!

salooma

ValerieB726
Junior Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 14
Louisville,OH, USA
4 posted 2000-08-16 07:39 PM


This was Very good! i liked it a lot!
Good luck! valerie

SweetPoet17
Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

5 posted 2000-08-16 11:26 PM


I really enjoyed that.  
-jessica-

Crystalina123
Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

6 posted 2000-08-17 08:47 AM


Jen --
The story of my life. I like this poem and I smile b/c I can relate. I like the way you put this together.

Love,
Crystal

Acies
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
7 posted 2000-08-17 09:53 AM


simple but sweet............keep up the good work

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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