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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-08-16 02:41 AM


Beyond the Gates

Flying carelessly upon the arms
of she who captures you
is but a dream seen by only
those who fly there too.
Praying nightly, yet in vein,
your tearsoaked eyes peer on.
Never loosing sight of she
who takes the heart beyond.
Beyond those gates of who she is
or where she hides her heart,
lies the limit of the love
you know will someday start.
Beyond the gates locked by the nights
of solitude's dispair,
gazes the one who prays that you
will find her waiting there.

Jeremy D. Halstead  8-16-00


"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

© Copyright 2000 Jeremy D. Halstead - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-08-16 02:47 AM


jeremy~~~you are so talented!!! i dont know why you would even think about quitting something that you are so good at...well buddy keep up the good work!!!im so glad to call you my friend...im mean look at this poetry that you write j/k...haha

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

kimmy
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since 2000-07-31
Posts 98

2 posted 2000-08-16 03:18 AM


that was a really good poem~it is deep and it sounds like it is coming straight from your heart~i hope to read more of your poetry!
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
3 posted 2000-08-16 03:28 PM


This is one of Jer's friends and I just wanted to bump this up before it fell off becuase.......well......I like it....

Bud

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
4 posted 2000-08-16 04:10 PM


Hey! Geez your poems are like my all-time favorites. This is soo awesome. I LOVE your work. Keep writing..

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

5 posted 2000-08-16 07:20 PM


I almost lost between all the other poems and thank god i found it! it's breathtaking!
you are truely an artist, don't ever let go of this...it's beautiful!

salooma

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
6 posted 2000-08-16 10:37 PM


Excellent Jeremy ... simply beautiful!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
7 posted 2000-08-16 10:58 PM


Must be the name Jeremy that acquires so much talent! Ok, Im gonna stop flattering myself. This was so awesome bro, keep it going, i cant wait til I read another piece!

,._-=-*^~Jeremy~*^-=-_.,

Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

8 posted 2000-08-18 06:50 PM


Hi I think this is a great poem! Keep up the great work and I hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
9 posted 2000-08-18 06:54 PM


Wonderful poem you've written here Jeremy, your work is very good
TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
10 posted 2000-08-19 01:18 PM


Jer,
Hadn't read this one until today......

Of course I think it's beautiful. A bit darker and more mystical than your usual, but an intersting forge into this area. Keep it up.

Thomas

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
11 posted 2000-08-19 07:32 PM


Hey Jeremy,
   I really enjoyed reading this.  Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
12 posted 2000-08-20 05:28 PM


Never cease to amaze me my dear!! Keep it up! this one was a little different from your usual...but that's good cuz you did it wonderful and this style suits you well also! Love ya. ~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

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