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I Love You --- PLEASE READ ANYONE
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I Love You --- PLEASE READ ANYONE |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I haven't written a poem in a while. Thanks to this wonderful person who's been e-mailing me for a while (You know who you are Pryncess  ), I've been inspired to write about my feelings to the girl who's name I carry backwards as my username. And post it for everyone to appreciate or criticize. I love you... I love you with all my heart, my mind, my soul I'll love you even beyond Death's knock at my door Like a stream flowing from the rains of an April day A flower's blooming scene during the month of May I love you without doubt and questions asked I'll love you even after eternity's time has already passed Like horizon's gold on morning's daily gift of light Or a full moon's pride on a cloudless and starry night I love you beyond love's own unexplored definition I'll love you even thru all of love's own contradictions Like an eagle's majesty as it spreads it's wings in flight Or that of a parent's touch on their newly born child Above all... I love you for I've realized one thing to be true I'll always love you for I realized that "Love is You" I love you... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I never realized that your user name is "Erica" spelled backwards. That's my name, too! How cool is that? This is a beautiful love poem. (And as a LoveBug, I'm a good one to judge!) Have you given this to her? I hope so. Good luck!"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
well sweetie, this one was excellent as usual! I know how hard it is for you and I can only hope that one day things will get better for you! you know I'll ALWAYS be here for you whenever it gets hard...or whenever it isn't that hard and you just wanna talk. you're such a sweet heart and you don't at all deserve a broken heart. you deserve the best and one day, you will find her! My heart goes out to you my dear. I'm glad I sparked some inspiration in ya! I feel special now! Keep your head up ok?!!? Love ya bunches! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~< !signature-->~*~Why is it that love always starts with a hug, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear?~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 08-14-2000).] |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
Wow this is such a beautiful poem! I wish that someone felt this way about me! Keep up the good work and i'm definatley gonna read more of your poetry! Alexis |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Another beautiful poem... I hope all works out, and if not, I'm always here to lend and ear (or eye in this case) so you can e-mail me... Wonderful job on your poem, though... Love, Kristi "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thats pretty cool that your name is hers backwards, thats sweet, i hope she knows how you feel, im sure she'd be flattered, nice poem, i wish to read more, keep it up bro. ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is a really romantic poem, you've got some real talent. Can't wait to read more |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow this is beautifuuuuulllllllll!!!!!!! wonderful and sweet and wow...i always wanted to know what acire was supposed to mean...if i may can i suggest one change that could make it flow smoother in the second stanza?? right here, u don't ahve to use it, just see what you think... "I love you beyond love's own unexplored definition I'll love you even thru all of love's own contradictions Like an eagle's majesty as it spreads it's wings in flight Or that of a parent's touch of their child just born that night." very nice anyhow....beautiful ending "love is you" keep these beauties coming! Salooma |
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GodsPerfktAngel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28Ohio |
 WOW Jocelyn M. Cosgray ~*you cannot hold back a laugh any more than you can a tide,both are forces of nature*~ |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
DITTO Angel stay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 08-16-2000).] |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thank you all again for you kind replies to my writing. I'm glad that you like it. It gives me more inspiration to write more. Once again, Thank You sooooooo much As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey babe! Is your mission in life to make me cry reading all your poems? LOL This was like so..oh i dont even know what to say! I wish someone would write something like that for me! And thats pretty clever with your name. Keep up the great work..i'll need to stock up on my kleenex lol <3 always~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
hey your from chicago too??? where do you stay by???i didnt think anyone else was from chicago...but i know there are a couple of people from IL... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
DancinQueen --- sorry if my poems upsets you, but still thanks for the compliment Erin --- huh? lolAs i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
acire~~~i seen where you introduced yourself and it said you were from chicago...so i am asking you where do you stay by in chicago??? ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Can't tell you that, it's dangerous.....Just say Willowbrook, Hinsdale, Downers Grove Area As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I love this! It's so sweet. I wrote a poem for my boyfriend, we'll just call him nitsuj, and he loved it. Maybe youshould give it to her. And I like the name thing. My name is actually spelled differently, with two s and one l, but I found this spelling on a certificate before it changed and I like it. Allyssa |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa --- I just wonder why you people say it's so sweet, but when I finally read it to her recently, all she said is "oh, that's nice". It sounded pretty much like she actually hated it, and that she forced herself to say something a little nice about it. by the way, i love what you called your bf. I thought that was pretty cute . took me a while to figure it out, duh!!!As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
just a friendly bump  would like new member to read ~*bump*~ I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
nitsuj and I broke up a while ago and I know you know that. ANyways, she should have cared b/c I don't understand. I mean, I walk around this wretched world, trying to find one person in this world who cares about me, and I'd be happy if ANYONE (hint hint) (JK) would write ANYTHING for me!!!  I love you acire, we all do, and if she doesn't, well, try again. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a really romantic poem.......awwwwww how sweet. So who's the girl buddy? Is it me? AWWWWWWWWWWW it's me everybody!!!! ......uhhhhh.....or not... CUZ IM A GUY!!!!!!!!!! mwhahahaha!!! OK but yea, im cutting my BS......great poem acire......  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was sooo sweet!!! I absolutely loved it!! It was beautiful!! Keep up the great work!! Much luv, Priscilla ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Bravo Acire this is truely beautiful, i wish a guy would write somehting liek that for me!! lol ~*Justine*~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Yeah, what Justine said! Me and Teenie seem to think a lot alike...Teenie if no BOYS will write a poem for you, I WILL! Because I am your best friend! *L* ANYWAYS... This was a REALLY sweet poem *happy tears happy tears* WHERE'S MINE?! J/K obviously, nice work here -=Suga=- |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I have someone like this. I understand entirely....Great poem... Muah! Love ya. Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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