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A special person (help needed, every comment welcome)
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A special person (help needed, every comment welcome) |
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MelissaL Junior Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 22Joshua Tree, CA, US |
A thousand words never said My love not shared enough I remember your laugh, so warm and pure Your loss was more than tough I was only a child that day in March My mind still growing with wonder I couldn't accept that you were gone My life turned a cloud of thunder I wept those days I saw you weak Your love was stronger than others Your life started to fade and slip away More than a best friend, you were my mother Your hugs could cure a million frowns Affection filled your heart Whenever I was in need of care You were there, never wanting to part Your soul will live forever, mom The pain finally did subside Although you are in a more beautiful place You will never leave my mind. [This message has been edited by MelissaL (edited 08-13-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family! This is an incredibly emotional first post Melissa. You've touched me deeply with this beautiful and heart-felt tribute to your mother. I am grateful to see that some of this difficult pain has receded, and you are able to write about your special bond in such a loving and tender way. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)  Best wishes and prayers, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow. This is so emotional and powerful. I honestly like it just the way it is, it's very moving. Welcome to passions and to the teen forum I can't wait to read more of your poems! |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I expected this poem to be about the loss of a boyfriend but it wasn't. I think this is an incredibly wonderful poem not to mention a first post. I like this poem because it makes you stop and think. Sometimes I don't treat my mother the best and maybe I need to be more careful. Thanks for making me think. Love, Crystal |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
this is just absolutely beautiful all over...the poem itself, the idea, your love..everything is just simply beautiful ...need I say more?  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
noThis poem is absoultly beautiful! I'm sorry for u're lose it's hard i know, but welcome to passions. I can't wait to see more of your poetry! Alexis |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was a absolutly gorgeous poem i wouldn't change a thing i can feel your emotion and i knwo tis hard im very sorry you had to go thru this kepp them coming!  Love ya Bunches ~Jen~ The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a very touching poem and i am gald you posted it...keep on writing |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't have much to say about this poem for right now it's made me teary eyed.....You deserve a standing ovation from everyone in passions. I think this is the most touching tribute to a mother that I've ever read. As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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