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Memories are all that's left
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
To fall in love or break it up And if young love is just a game Anything but I'd go through hell for you And I haven't been this scared in a long time And I'm so unprepared This world's an ugly place But you're so beautiful to me Two different people, two different places Through a one way window with two different faces It was you who told me that, it wouldn't work because we come from different places and that we mask ourselves with differnt faces She looks at me and doesn't know the words to say But it's not her, she just doesn't feel quite right today All these things she'd say and do were never planned But how is she supposed to make me understand When I woke up, the rain was pourin' down. There were people standing all around. Something warm going through my eyes, She lift her head, she looked at me and said,"Hold me darling just a little while." I held her close. I kissed her our last kiss. I found the love that I knew I had missed. Well now she's gone, even though I hold her tight. I lost my love, my life, that night. And now I understand that it wasn't not up to me And now I understand that all she did was never planned. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow* this was really strong and powerful. THere's true passion behind your words. KEep writing cause i want to read more  ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm speechless....uhhhhhhhhh....I'm just hoping this didn't happen in real life...Did it? I hope not, cause right now it's making me feel really bad. I just can't imagine anyone else going thru something like this. I hope I misunderstood the poem for it's tragic. As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i had to read this twice just to make sure i was reading it correctly...so did this really happen???i hope not...you wrote a really good poem...keep up the good work... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Truely touching, the words seemed to flow very well from your heart, great job at representing your sadness. I hope to read more. ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., "I will know where I'm headed, cause I'm so tired of the suffering I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection" ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
Hey I'm back and really feelin this one Have you ever noticed the best poems are usually sad ones? Just an observation,Stay tru |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was great. I really liked it, keep writing. ~sweetstuff~ ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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JR Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22morris il |
it takes a true poet to express deep thoughts and your right on the brink keep writing and soon you will be one of the greats. "two roads diverged in a wood and I... I took the one less traveled by... ...And that has made all of the difference." --Robert Frost |
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Emmaline Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15 |
TrueLUV ~ I really liked this poem. And though the ending is from Pearl Jam's Last Kiss, it seems to fit really well with what you were writing of. ~ Emma |
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