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TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California

0 posted 2000-08-10 06:05 PM


The sound of a gun going off is louder then being stabbed with a knife
When that gun went off it ended my life

Everyday I ask myself why I had to live my life the wrong way
Now my only wish is that I could live just one more day

Just so I can say goodbye to my family and friends
But how was I supposed to know my life would just sudenly end

If I could have said one last thing it would have to be
Everyone out there turn your life around now before you end up like me!

  By,
   Lauren

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Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
1 posted 2000-08-10 06:32 PM


I really like the message here, about people turning their live around.  Good work!
Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

2 posted 2000-08-10 10:41 PM


Great message you give in this poem, I wish more ppl listened to it! Good luck and spread this out, I think we'll benifit  

Salooma

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
3 posted 2000-08-11 02:06 AM


Thankyou to the 2 people who actually responded.But that's pretty sad only 2 responces.
  Lauren

SweetPoet17
Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

4 posted 2000-08-11 04:14 AM


Thats a really good poem, I really enjoyed that, and the message is real good, I mean it is definitely true that we can not take life for granted.
-jessica-

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