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Isabelle
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana

0 posted 2000-08-09 10:26 PM


Don't ask why I posted this I don't really like this poem but I still wanted to know your opinions don't be afraid to eat it up.


I'm to the point,
The point of no return
I must continue
Keep walking that path
The path full of pain
Path of tears

If you feel you can help
Be free to try
But I'm at the Point

I'm standing at the bottom
With an empty heart
Waiting for one person to reach out
To pull me from this black hole
One not scared to get too close
One of love and caring



"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


© Copyright 2000 Jeanna - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
1 posted 2000-08-09 10:51 PM


We've all been there before! I dont think it was bad at all, It was direct and told us about yourself a little bit. Just keep writing to free your emotions.

Love,
,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_.,

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-08-09 11:41 PM


just like jeremy said alot of us have been there at one point in our life...and i liked this one...your telling us your emotions and how you feel...isnt that good???

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-08-09 11:42 PM


opps...i made a mistake...sorry!!!< !signature-->

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-09-2000).]

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-08-10 01:31 PM


I like they way this got my attention fast and kept it.  Great work
sweetstuff101
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
5 posted 2000-08-10 03:28 PM


that wasn't bad at all, it was good. Keep writing.


~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~



Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

6 posted 2000-08-10 10:54 PM


this was really good by the way, very nicely put. just cause it's short doesn't mean you haven't conveyed your idea fully and in wonderful form...don't hesitate to post, we wanna read more!

salooma

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