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Silent soul
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tx,usa

0 posted 2000-08-09 02:30 AM


I am worthless
it's plain to see
I am worthless
a failure thats me
I am worthless
from head to toe
I am worthless
but who would know
I am worthless
cant you see
I am worthless
just leave me be
I am worthless
just let me die
I am worthless
that is NO lie
I am worthless
just let me kill
I am worthless
but I can TRY to heal
I am worthless
peace be with you
I am worthless
never again shall I feel blue
I am worthless
I know it's true
but tell me
am I worthless to you1

Tell me what ya think! and if ya like it I'll post more it just depends!



peace <3
Silent
Life is to short to be pissed off all the time



© Copyright 2000 Ashley - All Rights Reserved
Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

1 posted 2000-08-09 02:36 AM


oh well, the poems really good, flows very nicely...but i fear the idea of worhtlessness. you should never thing of yourself so unworthy, then again i do not know the depths of the poem, but feel free to email me if you wanna talk...

salooma

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
2 posted 2000-08-09 02:41 AM


I agree, no one is worthless. The poem has nice form. Keep up the good writing.

,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_.,

LoveBug
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3 posted 2000-08-09 02:58 AM


Soul, you are only what you make of yourself. The only people who are truely worthless are those who give up on themselves and on life. I hope you can see that, my friend.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
4 posted 2000-08-09 08:14 AM


Stop that! I'm a Mom of six kids and just for a minute, I'm going to be your Mom, You are a precious and a wonderfully unique creation of God, He has a plan that is all yours. Find it within yourself. Y ou are only as wothy as you love others. So do that!
I'm counting on you to BE the the best you can and to go out and make a difference today, if only to smile at someone who looks like they need one! End of lecture!
You also have a wonderful talent as a poet, use it to get out all those feelings, this works, it has for me. love and hugs from
your ciber Mom

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

Acies
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5 posted 2000-08-09 10:13 AM


You can obviously write, and that makes you worth something.  I bet you there are other things you can do too, and that makes you even worth more.  Get where i'm getting at?  Keep writing  

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
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6 posted 2000-08-09 12:19 PM


Worthless?  i think not.  You and your poetry is worth so much to us Please post more so we can all check it out!
LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-08-09 12:21 PM


I really like your poem. I didn't see it as if you were condemning yourself, the end is an obvious rebuttal to the rest of the piece. I thought you were expressing your own hurt at having been rejected and belittled by those who don't really know you. After being treated like a worthless person, you were low on self confidence and are asking for a person who will love you and admire you. You added a definate message of hope right there at the end. Maybe I'm way off. Anyway, I liked it.

*~Meredith~*

Somebody stop the world,
I want to get off!
*me

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa
8 posted 2000-08-09 01:55 PM


Thanks all of you! it helps me just to know some people do care!

Ellie- Thanks I'm glad you care, and that's why I write poetry to help get my feelings that I can't express through some other way(if that made any sense)

I'll post some more later, but just to let yall know most of my poetry isn't exactly very happy  



peace <3
Silent
Life is to short to be pissed off all the time



Jenn Cirrincione
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9 posted 2000-08-09 07:13 PM


I feel like that sometimes, but don't fear I hear that those feelings fade eventually.
Good work, and good luck to you.
Jenn

JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
10 posted 2000-08-09 08:57 PM


     We all have our moments when we feel like we mean nothing, but those are but demons that are within us.  I'm a teenager as well and it's interesting 'cause the older I'm getting(I'm 19 now) the sillier things seem to me.  Like the things I worried  about in high school are just so ridiculous.  Granted that I get that way from time to time, but the older I get and the more I learn academically I have ben able to step back and look at how silly it was for me to search for my identity within the mainstream of media and their 'perfections'.  But that's me.
      I loved the poem and I relate to it as you can tell lol, and I hope u may write more because believe it or not, the more u write these feelings, the better you will feel too.  So don't go getting discouraged if many do not reply back    Good luck   Sorry about the length of this reply lol

Fairy Princess
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 64
Fitchburg Ma, USA
11 posted 2000-08-10 04:52 PM


Hey never feel like your worth less. Cause everyone is worth something feel free to email me...    

Keep hope in you, Keep, dreams in you, And you'll be fine - Unknown


Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

12 posted 2000-08-10 05:21 PM


I know the feeling, but believe me, you are not worthless!  Nobody is worthless-really.  So keep that in mind-keep writing
Bel

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
13 posted 2000-08-10 06:07 PM


Well I've always felt worthless and this poem was really good.I think you should keep posting poems you have a real talent!Keep up the great work.
  Lauren

Silent soul
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since 2000-06-10
Posts 73
tx,usa
14 posted 2000-08-10 09:17 PM


Thanks ya'll you make me feel like I'm worth something thanks for that feeling!


peace <3
Silent
Life is to short to be pissed off all the time



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