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Love Is Nothing But A Broken Heart
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Love Is Nothing But A Broken Heart |
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FeMaLe SeNzAsiaN Junior Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 20 |
Love is Nothing But a Broken Heart With each and every passing day, with every lonely step I take, With every moment lost in dreams, I know loving you was my mistake I opened up my eyes to you, and then I opened up my heart I even opened up my soul for you, and let you in the deepest part I shared with you my feelings. . .my hopes and dreams and fears For you I fought with all my might, for you I shed those bitter tears I took every painful blow, I swallowed every bit of pride I gave you everything I could, till there was nothing left inside For you I risked it all, I put my heart and soul at stake I made endless promises to you that forever will not break Even when my heart ached deeply on those long and sleepless nights, I’d wipe away the tears and still thank God you were in my life There’s something deep inside you that I could never find in someone else And that’s what makes me love you even more than life itself But the more I seem to love you, the more I seem to hurt And with every passing moment the loneliness gets worse My common sense got left behind, but the truth’s not hard to hide Love is nothing but a broken heart that’s killing me inside. |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
I love your poetry I really do it's so heartfelt. I can feel your pain if that doesn't sound strange! I guess because maybe I've been there and I'm still there. Keep your head up girl. I know it hurts now it really does and it's good that u put that hurt into poetry and not something else! But time will heal your broken heart. Keep up with the beautiful poems , they are really great! Love ~Alexis~ |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
Well July 19th that happened to me... June 28th.. my virginity, and then my heart July 6th... -jessica |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wowie...so tough and yet writ by the hands of an artist. Beautiful! It flows so smoothly and nicely and you words nicely chosen....loved this: "My common sense got left behind, but the truth’s not hard to hide Love is nothing but a broken heart that’s killing me inside." Bravo!! Salooma |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
2 thumbs up for you...you are a very talented writer...keep up the good work...my favorite line was:the more i seem to love you, the more i seem to get hurt...dont ask me why cuz i dont know i just like that line!!! ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
What are you kidding me? This is absolutely one of the best poems Ive ever read! I cant wait until I read more, you have a very intriguing way of flow in your poems, it just makes my eyes follow line for line. This one really came from the heart, I hope you still have some work left in that skillfull hand! Keep it up! Love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this is a really well written poem i enjoyed it and can totaly relate i really like "love is nothign but a broken heartkilling me inside" good use of words very intense keep it up! Love Ya Bunches ~jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
AwwWww..i LOVE your poetry! Everyone poem makes my heart melt and almost makes me cry. Keep posting!! ~!*DQ*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
wow, great job with this! I think it's written very well, nice work  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i know i replied to this poem before already, but my reply is not in here..hmmmmmm well, u should already know by now how much i love your poetry. you have written the sweetst poems in passions. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was sad......i hope things are better now.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was sad......i hope things are better now. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
In a way i feel the same exact way...i can definately relate to what you said. Great Poem! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
There’s something deep inside you that I could never find in someone else And that’s what makes me love you even more than life itself ============================================= This is a true tugger of heart the expression you have weaved into the ryhme has touched me... The above quote from your poem depicts a true love yet the hurt at the end of the rhyme had me with tears in my eyes... Great write PoetGurl coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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