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Mirror Of Tears..everyone please respond...
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Mirror Of Tears..everyone please respond... |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
Our love flourished within the petals of the unknown... My eyes teared with thoughts of eternity... My life grew with happiness... Lightning struck my heart with such force... That it broke into two solid pieces... Our memories swirled throughout my pondering mind... My hands trembled with worry... My body shook with fright... I look into the glass for a deep reflection... I touch my face... I look at my sorrowful tears... And I shake with disbelief... The lips he once kissed have become blessed with tears... The eyes he once looked at have become red from heart ache... Who am I? I am a girl with a broken heart like a fallen angel... I am a girl with tears of heartache like a widow... I am a girl... Who are you? You are a boy, a man you pretend to be... Your words show nothing of that... Look at this broken heart within me... My mind has been shoken... My life has been changed... My heart has been stolen... My teears have fallen... And where are you? You are in the street... You are in your house... You are at your job... And you are in my dreams... For that is all... For you have given me the hardest fall... The fall of love... of heart ache... of reality... I look at myself once more... I ponder the face you said goodbye too... I wonder as I wipe my tears away... If you will ever think of me oneday... I turn away... I walk towards the door... And I shake my head in disappointment... A man you said... Thats what you were... A boy you said... Thats what youll never be again... Well you were wrong by far my friend... Cause this heart... Will bleed as long as I live... |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
I am at a loss for words I loved it I don't know what else to say except I wish I could take the pain away talk to you later Jessica  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
My Dear SweetPoet, I wish I could say I had the answers to end your pain, but that would be a lie. I think each person has to come to grips with the pain when their ready, but friends that care will help you go through it and you are in the right place passions has more loving souls then any where I know of. I will keep you in my prayers and you can contact me if you need, wonderful poetry my friend. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Is this about who I think it is....either way, it's a wonderful piece of work. It feels to me like this all just flows out of you so easily. Writing poems is so hard for me...they take me so long and I can never seem to find or even know what I want to say most of the time. You seem to have all that under control....keep it up. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Sweetpoet: I'm a Mom and I wish I could hug you this minute. Even tho it's been years since I felt the pain of my first loves heartbreak, I can remember it as if it were yesterday. I was devistated too. Then I met my soulmate and we've been married for 36 years. Time does funny things to the pain. You are doing the right thing by writing about it. Your poetry is exquisite, you are a truly gifted poet. Get lost in writing for now, it will help. Love, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Mel2Lizz Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 20Alamosa, Colorado |
I really enjoyed this..took me back a few years.. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
sweetpoet~~~this was a really good poem...i am sorry that you feel like this...but we all have at one point in out lives...the first guy that broke my heart was my best friend...he played me for a fool...while i was with him he got with my girl best friend...and now everytime i see him i cant stand to look at him...he plays around with me saying mean stuff and i just go off on him...but eventually this stage will pass...it didnt take long for me...and i hope that it doesnt stay long for you... ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
hey....awesome poem really! very touching and in all ways beautiful but yet so heartwrenching! this is so emotional, it's just hard to bear actually, but yet pain resides in us all, we just don't enjoy looking it's way....keep u're head up dear...someday you'll find the one worthy of all tthat you are! Salooma |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
Dear Sweetpoet, This is a very beautiful and... i can't really find the words for it! I'm new to passions and your poem has really touched my heart! I'm a teenager myself and I know how it feels, i may not know your exact pain but I can tell u that the hurt will subside but it will never go away! In this poem you wrote so beautifully ho it feels to have your heart broken and that's a hard thing to describe. Keep up the good work and I hope every thing works out for you! |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
sweet poet, you are a very tlented writter!! im glad that i got to read oneof your poems!! ilove it!! i cant wait to read more. im orry for you lo. but keep your head up there other s out there who realy care!! trust me iv egone through the ssame hing but im better now only iended back with the guy who broke my heart more than once!! janette Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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