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My life has always been Broken...
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My life has always been Broken... |
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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
*this is about the fact no one really knows me, guess I'm just to strange to be understood* BROKEN Hills of memories cloud my mind The world I live in at the moment Seems so unusual to your kind Another page of my book, the end I stroke and How can you help me ?! If I don’t even know my broken side Please don’t forget to help me Help me, help me, help me, with this life When I close my eyes, people are Covering my head with this sand In my thoughts I just travel so far From age to age, land to land You don’t want me to say That you just don’t understand But I’d say everything for you to stay Except the mask I wear is falling off and How can you help me ?! If I don’t even know my broken side Please don’t forget to help me Help me, help me, help me, with this life The twists and turn are getting to My head, feeling so strange and shocked Why does no one really know who, get’s me and all the hurting I locked I think I just don’t have an equal that Just is me in my storytelling flow Some one who feels the way I met, This empty whole in my life, so How can you help me ?! If I don’t even know my broken side Please don’t forget to help me Help me, help me, help me, with this life I just ask you to try... please TRY !!! How can you help me ?! If I don’t even know my broken side Please don’t forget to help me Help me, help me, help me, with this life |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, I haven't read any of your other work before, but I really enjoyed reading this one. I liked the repetition. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well lone if you wanted someone to help you why dont you tell us what you need help with...and then from there some people would understand you...but anyways this is a good poem!!!keep up the good work... ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Very well written. I do have to agree with erin if you tell us we could help you. Well keep up the work. Jeanna  "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
I know how it feels the fact that no one really know's you. I'm the same way, but I brought it upon myself. I tried to be what everyone wanted me to be and not myself. I found that more people liked me for me and not my cover up! This is a really good poem and I hope to see more of your work. Hold your head up everything works out in the end. ~Alexis~ |
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