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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2000-08-06 02:56 AM


**Sorry this has no title..im just so frustrated with guys. And im so sick of getting hurt...sorry

I can't take this anymore,
I want to rip my hair out.
Why in the hell are you acting like this?
what's this all about????

I've done nothing but love you,
I'd do anything for you.
But lately nothign is enough,
and i have no idea what to do!

The hot tears stain my cheeks,
like lava running down a mountain.
The tears won't stop,
pouring like a fountain.

Why am i crying?
I know i'm better than this.
I just wish it wasnt you,
that i always miss.

I dont know what to say
I want to make it all go away
My heart wont let me this time
so i have nothing left to say.

I regret ever knowing you
and giving you my heart.
I should have known,
you'd just shred it apart.


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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Stotty
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since 2000-06-06
Posts 29

1 posted 2000-08-06 03:14 AM


Wonderful Poem!  That's all I can say, I love the way it is structured, so very true too.  
Kind regards -
Michelle.

Kyle Finn
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 36
Linn, MO USA
2 posted 2000-08-06 03:18 AM


sorry to hear that your hearts broken and ya cant say anything just let time take it away, spend time with friends and family thatll help trust me ive been there...anyway this is a great piece, much better than any of mine
SweetPoet17
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

3 posted 2000-08-06 09:26 AM


I feel you.   ( and I know its hard, but life goes on, although its hard to truly realize, your heart will go on also.   whats meant to be will be.
-jessica-

Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
4 posted 2000-08-06 10:20 AM


this was a great poem
i really enjoyed it
and im sorry you had to go thru all this pain  

as for a title how about something liek REGRET ?!
keep writing
                

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

5 posted 2000-08-06 11:59 PM


great post....i can tell you're frustrated...emotion pours from this. keep your head up and don't let em get you down. send me an email if you ever wanna talk. good luck.

salooma

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-08-07 02:40 AM


DQ~~~im sorry that you feel this way...if i was able to i would give you a big hug...then introduce you to one of the sweetest guys i know...but since i have no idea where you live which is probably all the way across the country from me i cant...dont worry one day the perfect guy for you will come along...till then you just got to put up with these guys that keep hurting you...

~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~

~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~

Lone Insomniac
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 45

7 posted 2000-08-07 06:13 AM


Hey !
well...I'm sorry to hear that U hate guys..
but about the poem..I think it's great !!!
I like it when poems aren't that soft and stuff...
you showed some real raw emotions with this poem...
great work... =)

greetz...
-RobIN-

Acies
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8 posted 2000-10-03 05:45 PM


talking about pouring out you emotions.  This really is a good example of it.  That only means thast this poem is really very well writen. I'm sorry that you have to go thru all these.  You know you can talk to me

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Lakewalker
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9 posted 2000-10-04 02:48 PM


I love this poem, it's so full of emotion and feelings.  I really like this part:

Why am i crying?
I know i'm better than this.
I just wish it wasnt you,
that i always miss.

DancinQueen
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10 posted 2000-10-04 04:49 PM


Lakewalker~~ hey once again   thats one of my favorite parts too cause i know im better then him and i shouldnt be crying but i am and it makes me so mad

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
11 posted 2000-10-04 07:12 PM


This poem is great.
I don't know how I missed it the frst time around.
I have never really felt this way about an ex. I've always just sort of "rolled with the puches."

sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
12 posted 2000-10-04 07:41 PM


this is great!! I have felt this way recently about a guy and I don't know what to do about it. I really liked this poem, tho. Great job! Keep writing!!

Luv,
~*~Sweetstuff~*~


~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~


DancinQueen
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13 posted 2000-10-04 10:53 PM


Jose~~>sometimes i wish i could just "roll with the punches"  

sweetstuff~~> hi   I always thought our poems were smiliar


~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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