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GodsPerfktAngel
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 28
Ohio

0 posted 2000-08-05 03:40 PM


We used to be best of friends,
but this story tragicly ends

We were driving home form a party that night
that truck cam barrelling down our side of the road
it was a horendous sight

Both of our parents had to be strong
when some one told them
"one has made it but one is almost gone"
The van hit us so hard he was going ot fast to stop
but now I am lying here in a pool of my blood
1/2 unconcious and about to go into shock

Tell mom I love her tell dad  its okay tell my sisters that im going to be okay.
Tell my boyfriend I love him he meant so  much to me tell the Librairan I wont be able to give her the late fee.


I heard someone say something so shocked I thunk:
"the reason I am dying is because someone was driving drunk"

© Copyright 2000 Jocelyn Marie - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-08-05 03:49 PM


is this story true??? if it is i am sorry that it happened...the scary thing about it is someone died cuz someone had just a little to much to drink...keep up the good work...

~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~

~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
2 posted 2000-08-05 06:34 PM


I've ready a poem similar to this..called "Someone SHould Have Taught Him" It was in the Chicken Soup for the Teenage Soul book. Excellent poem..keep writing

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
3 posted 2000-08-05 07:41 PM


This is such an awsome poem I hope this doesn't relate  to you life but it does I'm sorry.Keep up the exalent work I hope to read more of your poems.
  Lauren

Lone Insomniac
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45

4 posted 2000-08-05 08:19 PM


hey I think this poem is great !!!
A friend of mine was hit by a car a few years ago...he barely survived...
the guy was drunk..but then again...my friend was too !
If this happened to you in real life..i'm sorry to hear it...
but the poem is great....I can really see before me what U are telling..
fantastic !!!

Kittie
Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

5 posted 2000-08-05 08:39 PM


Very great and very strong and very wonderful. I'm sorry if this is true, keep your head up.
Kittie


SweetPoet17
Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

6 posted 2000-08-05 11:00 PM


I am in tears... I hope this isnt true, but the bottom line is this exists TRADEGY... the saddest part of life, dealing with it.
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-jessica-

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

7 posted 2000-08-06 12:02 PM


Great poem! Definatly a tough situation. Drunk driving happens too often these days, but I'm gald we are able to see what can happen from it! Great poem and keep on writing!

Salooma

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

8 posted 2000-08-06 12:02 PM


Great poem! Definatly a tough situation. Drunk driving happens too often these days, but I'm gald we are able to see what can happen from it! Great poem and keep on writing!

Salooma

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