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TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California

0 posted 2000-08-04 06:13 PM


The sound of a gun going off is louder then being stabbed with a knife
When that gun went off it ended my life

Everyday I ask myself why I had to live my life the wrong way
Now my only wish is that I could live just one more day

Just so I can say goodbye to my family and friends
But how was I supposed to know my life would just sudenly end

If I could have said one last thing it would have to be
Everyone out there turn your life around now before you end up like me!

  By,
   Lauren


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TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
1 posted 2000-08-04 06:24 PM


Aah...I am speachless, this is...this is...wow! It has such a strong and touching message, and...it's just great!

Keep up the good writing, cause I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

2 posted 2000-08-04 07:06 PM


This one definitely leaves me speechless.  Just wow...
Kittie



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3 posted 2000-08-05 01:06 AM


Welcome to Passions! This is a very powerful poem, I hope this isn't baised on something that happened to a loved one. Keep up the good work!  

(PS- check your e-mail!)

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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