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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Hi everyone, please don't laugh at my really rubbish poem displayed below... As I study I wonder what will come, The heart ache, the pain, will I face them one by one? Will I be strong enough to handle the pain and the anguish? For I am young, I know nothing of the world. As I rest I wonder who I really am, Will I reach goals I have set myself? Will I be the person who I long to be? For I have no wisdom, I yearn to have wisdom. As I dream I wonder where I will go, Will I travel to countries never seen? Will I eat with people never heard to rest of the world? For I have no knowledge, I long to have knowledge. As I ponder through old pictures I wonder what I will see, Will I see power and fortune? Will I see the damned and the untrustworthy cheat on me? For I have no experience, I long to have experience. As I eat I wonder what I will feel, Will I feel happy, loved or trusted? Will I feel hurt by the actions of others? For I feel nothing, I long to feel happy. As I wonder through these words just written, I wonder are they signifigent to you? Or will they be worthless? The future has all of the answers, I long to find the answers. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow...I will be totally honest with you...I love it! I think this is a wonderful poem, it's not rubbish, my exact feelings. I have wondered about these things over and over again, but all this wondering doesn't bring you anywhere, cause I'm still standing in te same place. To find all these things, you must be willing to live out there in te real world, beyond poetry, quite scary I might add, cause I took a peek...  Great poem! Keep it up! Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey, WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!! I really enjoyed your poem. I think that at one point in time everyone has these exact same thoughts. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
I didn't think this poem was too bad. I actually liked it. I want to welcome u to passions and hope to see more of your poems in the future. Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions!! This is definently not "rubbish". I know how you feel, wanting to find answers in a world that seems to have none. But you can achieve all these things you've written about! We are all still young, and we have our lives ahead of us. And the future is ours for the taking, it's there for us to mold. Again, welcome! (PS- check your e-mail!) "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Welcome to Passions even though I'm new too.I hope to read more of your poems because I liked this one. Lauren |
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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Hi everyone, I would just like to say..."Thanks a bunch" for your wonderful and generous comments. You have turned my bad day into a good one, I feel really good now! This was in truth, my first poem that I have ever written! I don't know how to structure them...anyone got any tips and advice for me? Thanks a lot, I hope to write more soon. Michelle. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful entrance Michelle ... this is a wonderful, inquisitive and thought-provoking poem! Welcome to Passions! Best wishes, /Kit PS. I noticed you also asked about where to learn more about poetic structure. If you go to the main forum (top left corner icon), then scroll down to Poetry and Prose Workshops, you may find just what you're looking for there. Enjoy! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Love it!!! We all go thru life asking ourselves what our future will be. Nobody knows the answer to that but us because our future is what we make of it. One thing I know about the future though is that I'd love to read more of your writing As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Acire...thanks a lot again, you have helped to build my confidence up greatly. As I have mentioned previously this was the first poem that I have ever constructed before so I didn't think it would be any good. I look forward to reading your poetry in the future. Michelle. |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
That poem was excellent, and so true. Thank you for that. I can relate closely to those words. -jessica- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
First and foremost....welcome to passions! Hope you enjoy it here as we all do. Now this poem, is much more than rubbish...wow! Definatly has interesting form, quality, and sentimental meaning within each and every word. I think I've felt as you do, but never could make much sense out of it to explain it as you did in this piece. Great writting keep at at! I'm definatly gonna be lookin' for your name. Salooma |
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Kyle Finn Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 36Linn, MO USA |
im just curious why would you wanna write like me when you can write like THIS its awesome i enjoyed it a lot its a great poem and if you really wanna write stupid peotry like mine just write what you think,feel,see,do,hear or how you live |
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