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Misty Blue
Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44


0 posted 2000-08-04 03:08 PM


This is a bit Deep


What I Felt That Night

Suddenly
I seemed to be drawn to you
Finally
You spoke to me
Carelessly
I left with you
Definitely
Is what you said to yourself
Immaturely
I fell into you
Confusingly
You succeeded to change my life
Secretly
Is how it should have been kept
Lonely
Is how I felt when you left
Obviously
I've learned from my mistakes
Occasionally
I think of you
Accidentally
We made a baby


© Copyright 2000 Misty Blue - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
1 posted 2000-08-04 05:10 PM


Wow~ I really liked this. IT flows very nicely. And im sorry to hear about what happened. But everything happens for a reason. Stay strong and things will get better  )

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
2 posted 2000-08-04 06:23 PM


That poem was pretty pwerful and it hit pretty close to me because that's exactly what happened to my friend.I know it's hard but eventually things will get better.
  Lauren

Misty Blue
Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44

3 posted 2000-08-05 02:36 AM


Hi! I just wanted everyone to know that no this particular situation did not happen to me I don't have a baby. I wrote this to show the different emotions a female can go through in the presence of being caught up. Thanks for reading and Stay Tru.

[This message has been edited by Misty Blue (edited 08-05-2000).]

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
4 posted 2000-08-05 02:40 AM


Nice form, it flows real well, keep up the good work!

.,-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-,.

SweetPoet17
Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

5 posted 2000-08-06 03:47 AM


excellent poem...truly...
-jessica-

Kyle Finn
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 36
Linn, MO USA
6 posted 2000-08-06 04:18 AM


thats a big responsibility and it musta been hard but itll get better and everything has its own purpose, the poem was great
Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-08-06 02:57 PM


oh wow!!! i dont know what to say...this is a good poem...2 thumbs up for you...im happy to hear that this didnt happen to you...but you wrote about it very good...i give you props for this poem...keep up the good work...


~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~

~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

8 posted 2000-08-06 11:52 PM


wow...great poem...hard feelings. wish you luck with all, but overall the poem is awesome. keep writing!

salooma

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