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Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA

0 posted 2000-08-04 02:22 AM


To John David Alexander,

As I hold you in my arms, you sleep,
And I gaze down at your face.
It hurts me when I realise,
I have finally found my place.

A life of such sweet innocense.
A heart I hate to break.
But I will have to leave soon,
No longer be hear when you wake.

I wish that you were truely mine
And I could take you when I go.
You have brough great joy to my life,
Just though that you should know.

All it takes is one sweet smile
And my face no longer has a frown.
And with your addicting laugh,
You pick me up when I am down.

The time is getting near,
To when I will have to move.
I hope you know I love you,
And that I wish you could come too.

It is fate that brought us together,
And life that takes us apart.
But no matter where I'll be,
You'll hold a special place in my heart.

You will grow up baby boy,
And turn into a fine young man.
Too bad I can't stay to watch,
I'll just cherish the moments I have.

You have your parents to love you,
Though, you, I wish I could keep.
That is why these tears fall,
As I hold you while you sleep.


**To the sweetest little rugrat in the world-->Alex.  The only man to ever win my heart...to bad he cant be 18 years older.**



[This message has been edited by Wicced_Witch (edited 08-04-2000).]

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Squirter
Junior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 17
Minnesota
1 posted 2000-08-04 10:30 AM


This is a great poem!  Shows your true feelings and emotions!  Keep up the great work!

Love Always,
Nicole

Kittie
Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

2 posted 2000-08-04 07:18 PM


Very beautifully put with very nicely expressed emotions. Great job, keep up the great writing.
Kittie



DancinQueen
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Senior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
3 posted 2000-08-04 07:55 PM


This was soo beautiful! I loved the line.. Fate brought us together and life takes us apart. Keep writing..i want to read more! =)

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-08-04 09:44 PM


Great poem.  I loved it, I hope that everything works out though.  Keep your head up, and the great work.

Chel


"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
5 posted 2000-08-04 10:20 PM


I loved this poem. I like how well u expressed your feelings in this poem. Keep up the good work.



"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
6 posted 2000-08-05 04:16 PM


As a father I must say that this is one of the best works I've read. We get attached to those in our lives that we love and it alwayz hurts when we can't be there for them forever. Thank you.

Thomas A. Plemmons

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

7 posted 2000-08-06 12:16 PM


Wow wonderful work and it's such a surprise at the end when you find out it's a little boy, but it's beautiful. Great writing and keep up the great work!

Salooma

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