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NaTaLy
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa

0 posted 2000-08-03 12:07 PM


i dream of looking into those devilish eyes
standing over her
as she pleads helplessly
but i have no mercy
she never knew what was coming
one minute
laughing with her friends
the next
lying in a pool of despair
blackness all around her
waiting
and it gets quiet
and the beast goes limp
and i,
chuckle to myself
and walk away.


nat<~~~~funny girl



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Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

1 posted 2000-08-03 12:39 PM


wish i could say i understood this, but i appreciate creativity...thanks for sharing!

salooma

Tara
Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
2 posted 2000-08-03 02:10 AM


wow......that is kinda scary even though i don't really understand it either.   it was definitely creative.  good work.....Tara
DancinQueen
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Senior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
3 posted 2000-08-03 03:55 AM


Wow...i totally didn't understand this. But i love your creativity. I'm gonna read it about 100 more times and maybe i'll get it by then =) keep up the great work*

~!*DancinQueen*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

4 posted 2000-08-03 01:55 PM


Wow!    I don't exactly understand it, but it has alotta emotion.  Nice work.  Keep writing
Bel
What exactly did this one mean?

NaTaLy
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa
5 posted 2000-08-05 07:09 PM


one word,bully. you figure out the rest ;p

nat<~~~~funny girl



TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
6 posted 2000-08-05 07:38 PM


This was a great poem keep up the great work I love your poem.
  Lauren

Kyle Finn
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 36
Linn, MO USA
7 posted 2000-08-05 07:39 PM


sounds like ya got in a fight with someone at school or somethin like that but nice...btw this is Kyle aka Huck
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