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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair

0 posted 2000-08-02 04:00 PM


My tears flow
  When I see your smile
    My tears flow
      When Im in denial
        My tears flow
          When Im thinking of you
            My tears flow
              When I dont know what to do
             My tears flow
           When my heart's on empty
         My tears flow
       When I wish you kissed me
     My tears flow
   Now that we're not together
My tears flow
When I try to remember

Goes out to Katie from TX. I miss you babe.

,._-=-^~* Jeremy *~^-=-_.,






© Copyright 2000 Jeremy Daniel Raulinaitis - All Rights Reserved
Tara
Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
1 posted 2000-08-02 04:53 PM


This is super sweet and sad too.  I don't know why but I think guys who cry are awesome because it proves that they can be sensitive instead of stupid and macho all the time.  Good work....Tara
Kittie
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since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

2 posted 2000-08-02 07:44 PM


I agree with Tara on the guys crying thing, and this is a really great poem too. Keep your head up, and keep up the great writing.
Kittie


Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-03 12:33 PM


wowieee.....sweet! definatly agree with the gals....guys who cry over things like this are the greatest. they care! good luck with Katie....hope it works out for you!

salooma

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-08-03 01:06 AM


good poem...i like your style!!! i wish you the best of luck with katie...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
5 posted 2000-08-03 01:39 AM


HEY! I loved this poem...and yep im agreeing with the rest of the girls..guys who cry are soo attractive because they are sensitive. Where have you been all my life? ;-) just kidding..keep writing i really love reading your work.

~!*DancinQueen*!~
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"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King


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DancinQueen
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6 posted 2000-08-03 01:40 AM






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Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

7 posted 2000-08-03 02:02 PM


Jeremy- that was incredibly sweet.  I agree with everyone, a guy who can cry over a girl is so sweet.  Keep your chin up, and good luck with the girl
Bel

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
8 posted 2000-08-03 07:00 PM


Absolutely beautiful. And this has to be the sweetest expression of love I've ever heard. You rock!

*~Meredith~*

If I were the sun,
You would be in shadow
And if I had a gun,
There'd be no tomorrow
*BNL

Misty Blue
Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44

9 posted 2000-08-03 08:59 PM


Hi!
I feelin you on this note Hun! Keep it up

SweetPoet17
Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108

10 posted 2000-08-04 06:51 AM


that was very sad, but yet so true, I understand the feeling, I feel it right now...

*SweetPoet17*

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
11 posted 2000-08-04 11:24 AM


Jeremy, Great poem.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
12 posted 2000-08-04 10:10 PM


Thx, wish other girls would see that. I appreciate all the responses!

,._=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-.,

Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
13 posted 2000-08-04 10:15 PM


I have got to say this is the sweetest poem i've read in awhile. You did a very good job at expressing your feelings for this girl.
Good work i loved it. Keep it up.

Jeanna  

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


lupigirl
Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 19
Mequon, Wisconsin
14 posted 2000-08-04 10:16 PM


I WISH I WAS KATIE!!!      Keep up the awesome work, Jeremy!  I love it!!  


TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
15 posted 2000-08-05 01:43 AM


Katie is a very lucky girl to have you I hope you know that.That was a great peom kep up the good work!
  Lauren

GodsPerfktAngel
Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28
Ohio
16 posted 2000-08-05 01:35 PM


Okay I will change my name to Katie If you write me some poems? hehehe j/k any ways good writing and keep it up!!!!
jeremydraul
Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
17 posted 2000-08-08 01:16 AM


Just want to know what everone thinks. Bumpin it up, sorry!
Salooma
Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

18 posted 2000-08-09 12:58 PM


loved this....bump*...any more replies?

Salooma

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
19 posted 2000-08-09 01:23 PM


This is so cool, highly enjoyable!
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